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[G-资料] 稀有Argument官方范文及教你如何从3分到4分

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BINGRAN 发表于 2014-10-7 19:55:22 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式

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这个是Argument的官方范文,不是网上随便能搜到的老范文,而是我从ets官方评分系统上扒来的范文,保证权威性,稀有性。1 有的童鞋可能不知道ets的官方评分系统,我先介绍一下。ETS的AW自动评分系统全称是ScoreItNow,同学们如果想知道自己写的怎么样,可以把自己的文章上传,由E-rater给你评分。虽然不是判卷人评分,但是还是有很高的参考价值的(e-rater和人的评分几乎是相同的)。

2 评分是花钱的,13刀两篇,在评分之后,ETS会给你你写的那篇文章的官方范文,我的范文就是从这里来的。
3 最终要的一点是,写AW多练习很重要,但是更重要的是方向。如果你不知道怎么写才会有高分,怎么写才会让ETS认可,那么你就走歪了,很难成功,这也就是很多人3分的原因。举个楼主的例子,我第一次在AW上用了很长的时间,但是因为方向不对,按照新东方的方法瞎写,最后3分。自从我看了范文之后,才明白如何写是好的,如何写是错误的。比如写Argument要按照direction写,要注意深入阐述,不能肤浅的指出他因等,最后楼主得了4分。所以看范文十分重要,建议大家多看官方范文,包括OG上的,verbal 150上的,当然还有我发的了如果大家仔细研究范文,在加以练习,不用你语言多好,照样4分
最后想大家多给点米啊,多给点积分,楼主正在申请,需要下载一些资料,苦于没米没积分啊如果大家对我3分到4分的经验感兴趣的话,欢迎提问,如果问的多的话,我详细写一写
先贴一篇6分的,我上传不了很大的文件。。。。。随后我继续上传5分的,4分的和3分的,大家不要小看这些非6分文章。同学们可以通过对比不同分数的文章来发现ETS的喜好,发现6分和4分的究竟差在那里,发现我为什么得3分。

这篇是Arguemnt 18

The decision to restorethe time devoted to weather and local news to its former level is one thatshould be made with more careful consideration of evidence, data, andviewer/client feedback by the business manager of this television station. Manyassumptions have been made on the business manager's part about the exact causeof the problems with the program. He or she should approach the idea of makingchanges with more caution.
The memorandum statedthat more complaints received from viewers were concerned with the station'scoverage of weather and local news, but it did not state the nature of thecomplaints. The viewers may have been complaining about the accuracy or qualityof the weather and local news rather than the shortened length of the segments.More specific information about the complaints--including whether they wereabout the late-night edition or about other news programs during the day--wouldsupport the argument because it would show if there was a relationship betweenthe shortened length of the segments in the late-night news program and theviewers' dissatisfaction with these particular segments. Sometimes it is thepersonalities and the chemistry of the news anchors that govern people'sdecisions about which station's news they watch. The business manager willnever know unless he asks the viewers exactly why they do or do not enjoywatching his news program.
Additionally, stated inthe memorandum was the fact that local businesses had just canceled theiradvertising contracts with the station. An assumption being made is that thereason businesses were pulling their ads was directly related to the shortenedsegments of the weather and local news. Considering the fact that more than onebusiness just pulled their ad, other factors could have been involved, such asany controversy that the station's national news may have recently brought up.Janet Jackson's notorious wardrobe malfunction comes to mind. Though thatincident happened during a national sporting event, there are many controversialnational news topics that have the potential to create such a stir with thelocal public. If the manager could establish that businesses discontinuedadvertising contracts specifically because they were displeased with the changein news coverage, and that the remaining advertisers are on the verge ofleaving if coverage of weather and local news is not increased, thatinformation would help eliminate other possible explanations.
Evidence that researchhad been conducted to find specific ways to attract viewers to a news programwould also strengthen the argument. Moreover, findings from research about whatviewers would like to see on the program may help. Assuming that they wouldlike to see more weather and local news does not seem safe. Perhaps they arelooking for something besides national news, local news, and weather alltogether. Or possibly they are tuning into another station that has somethingin their program that draws their attention. Data about which ratings arehighest and what people are watching would assist the business manager in hisor her decision about how to change the program.
The station cannotexpect to go back to the programming it once had and be successful. Obviously,something about the previous programming must not have been working; otherwisethey would not have changed their structure the last time. They cannot expectto see different results if they go back to the same structure. Carefulanalysis of all the factors I have presented is the best first step to making achange in the structure of their news program.
Reader Commentary for Essay Response – Score 6
This outstandingresponse clearly identifies specific evidence necessary to evaluate theargument, and explains lucidly why the evidence is necessary. This response doesa particularly nice job of both identifying specific evidence that wouldstrengthen the prompt's argument and identifying evidence that would underminethe argument. For example, the response notes that while the argument assumesthat lost advertising contracts are the result of the station's decreasedattention to weather and local news, myriad factors, this assumption isunsupported by specific evidence. The response then provides a cogent andthorough discussion of the kinds of evidence needed to examine this assumptionand how the evidence might strengthen or weaken the prompt's argument.
Each paragraph here isfully and cogently developed, and the response as a whole is organizedlogically. Finally, the response consistently demonstrates fluency and skillfuluse of language. For these reasons, the response earns a score of 6.

下面是5分,4分,3分的



5分.pdf

132.97 KB, 下载次数: 22, 下载积分: 大米 -1 升

4分.pdf

130.19 KB, 下载次数: 15, 下载积分: 大米 -1 升

3分.pdf

130.5 KB, 下载次数: 11, 下载积分: 大米 -1 升

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DDMM0615 发表于 2014-10-7 21:56:32 | 显示全部楼层
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 楼主| BINGRAN 发表于 2014-10-7 22:34:49 | 显示全部楼层
DDMM0615 发表于 2014-10-7 21:56
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谢谢支持,我还会发的,就是苦于没米啊
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 楼主| BINGRAN 发表于 2014-10-11 14:24:22 | 显示全部楼层

谢谢支持,来点米啊,你评分不会损失米的,谢谢了!
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debuger 发表于 2015-4-7 02:02:48 | 显示全部楼层
期待!            谢谢
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victorandcheer 发表于 2015-11-4 23:02:56 | 显示全部楼层
正解燃眉之急
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piolkjtrhd 发表于 2015-12-16 19:42:10 | 显示全部楼层
for me it's unreachable
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魏宝宝胖嘟嘟 发表于 2016-5-11 13:16:57 | 显示全部楼层
thank you for sharing.
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aaron61083511 发表于 2016-5-11 21:50:38 | 显示全部楼层
谢谢楼主啊
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