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[简历文书] beyond网站给我评测的简历,改起来250, 合理吗,有人试过吗

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datoumimi 发表于 2015-5-28 01:49:02 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式

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网站自动给我测评的,说的很有道理,我就是觉得有点贵,不过我也不知道行情,大家觉得呢

话说我的简历可能真的很悲催,挂到hired上两个星期都没几个公司看,也没有拿到interview,可能真的需要改改。

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Our goal for this critique was to provide you an honest, direct assessment of your current resume. By using an intelligent program that we created, we have scored your resume based on an evaluation of its content, structure and other key factors. Your resulting score is located in the upper-right corner of this page.
After evaluating your resume, we believe it needs some improvement to pass the 30-second test and avoid falling victim to some of the latest screening techniques being used by employers. Your resume should make hiring managers want to read more about you. It should show why you would be a great employee and create excitement about your skills and qualifications.
Your resume doesn't miss the target by much, but we suggest seeking professional assistance to improve your aim. A professional resume writer can showcase you as a prime candidate, help you stand apart from the hundreds of other applicants, and help you land your next interview. At the bottom of this 2-page critique you will find detailed information on our resume writing service. We encourage you to call and speak with one of our Career Advocates at (888) 447-1193 or email ResumeCritique@Beyond.com to discuss your critique. If you call within the next 48 hours, you will receive a 15% discount off of the regular price.
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  • Nice job, you have listed your work experience in the right order (reverse chronological), with your most recent experience first. You should also try to qualify and quantify your past accomplishments whenever possible to give them greater impact.
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calalia 发表于 2015-5-28 01:57:39 | 显示全部楼层
我在fiverr上改的

是一个HR 兼职改简历 改的挺好哒. 1point 3acres 璁哄潧
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才三四十刀. 鍥磋鎴戜滑@1point 3 acres

楼楼要地址的话我可以私信

250还是太贵了吧。。 感觉100以内合适

毕竟简历这种东西 中介也不能帮你做太多 都是做一些书面工作

格式 措辞什么的.鐣欏璁哄潧-涓浜-涓夊垎鍦

内容还得靠自己
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 楼主| datoumimi 发表于 2015-5-28 02:17:07 | 显示全部楼层
calalia 发表于 2015-5-28 01:57
我在fiverr上改的. 涓浜-涓夊垎-鍦帮紝鐙鍙戝竷

是一个HR 兼职改简历 改的挺好哒

要!麻烦给我发一下他的联系方式!
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 楼主| datoumimi 发表于 2015-5-28 02:53:53 | 显示全部楼层
calalia 发表于 2015-5-28 01:57. visit 1point3acres.com for more.
我在fiverr上改的

是一个HR 兼职改简历 改的挺好哒
. more info on 1point3acres.com
谢谢啦,我没有发短信的功能,只能在这说了
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kadimou 发表于 2015-5-28 03:16:23 | 显示全部楼层
太贵了吧,不值。我也花了50多刀在fiverr上改了,不过还没收到成品,先不评价。
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calalia 发表于 2015-5-28 03:35:46 | 显示全部楼层
datoumimi 发表于 2015-5-28 02:53
谢谢啦,我没有发短信的功能,只能在这说了

https://www.fiverr.com/boomsa

那我就发这里了
不知道楼上是不是也是找她改的
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rengokantai 发表于 2015-5-28 09:19:29 | 显示全部楼层
catalia同学说的差不多,改简历200多也太贵了, 而且技术职位真正能帮你拿到面试的还是你的水平和工作经历.. 1point3acres.com/bbs
我认识一个朋友简历就写了2/3页A4纸, 无实习, 也拿到很多大公司面试
(非技术职位, 改简历会有极大帮助)
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stephaniefan 发表于 2015-5-28 23:23:44 | 显示全部楼层
calalia 发表于 2015-5-28 03:35
https://www.fiverr.com/boomsa

那我就发这里了

看了一下感觉很靠谱,想了解下从下单到拿到改好的大概要花多久?还有是就怎么和她联系呀,感觉send messgae 都没反应= =。 谢谢!
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 楼主| datoumimi 发表于 2015-5-28 23:49:36 | 显示全部楼层
stephaniefan 发表于 2015-5-28 23:23
看了一下感觉很靠谱,想了解下从下单到拿到改好的大概要花多久?还有是就怎么和她联系呀,感觉send messg ...
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我看上面写着是十天,着急多花二十块钱 三天就能拿到。我是直接下单,然后发过去简历和cover letter。
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calalia 发表于 2015-5-29 00:01:20 | 显示全部楼层
stephaniefan 发表于 2015-5-28 23:23
看了一下感觉很靠谱,想了解下从下单到拿到改好的大概要花多久?还有是就怎么和她联系呀,感觉send messg ...

就是下订单就好了 她就会给你留言的
不加急的话大概一周
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stephaniefan 发表于 2015-5-29 02:39:17 | 显示全部楼层
datoumimi 发表于 2015-5-28 23:49
我看上面写着是十天,着急多花二十块钱 三天就能拿到。我是直接下单,然后发过去简历和cover letter。

好的!谢谢!楼主是已经拿到了吗?
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stephaniefan 发表于 2015-5-29 02:39:31 | 显示全部楼层
calalia 发表于 2015-5-29 00:01
就是下订单就好了 她就会给你留言的
不加急的话大概一周
. more info on 1point3acres.com
好的~感谢推荐!
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 楼主| datoumimi 发表于 2015-5-29 03:22:34 | 显示全部楼层
stephaniefan 发表于 2015-5-29 02:39
好的!谢谢!楼主是已经拿到了吗?

我昨天才下单,还没呢。。
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stephaniefan 发表于 2015-5-29 04:17:53 | 显示全部楼层
datoumimi 发表于 2015-5-29 03:22. visit 1point3acres.com for more.
我昨天才下单,还没呢。。

哈我也刚去下了单,搞了个三天的~希望有效!祝好运
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 楼主| datoumimi 发表于 2015-6-4 02:11:39 | 显示全部楼层
stephaniefan 发表于 2015-5-29 04:17
哈我也刚去下了单,搞了个三天的~希望有效!祝好运
. visit 1point3acres.com for more.
你的简历应该收到了吧, 改的怎么样啊,我还在等呢
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stephaniefan 发表于 2015-6-4 05:52:18 | 显示全部楼层
datoumimi 发表于 2015-6-4 02:11
你的简历应该收到了吧, 改的怎么样啊,我还在等呢

我不知道是不是她更擅长改非技术性的啊,给我硬生生改出来三页= =我自己又压缩了下
然后我放到 Monster 的测评里面试了下,结果很好~
不过 cover letter 不错然后还会附赠一些 tips
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 楼主| datoumimi 发表于 2015-6-4 06:24:52 | 显示全部楼层
stephaniefan 发表于 2015-6-4 05:52
我不知道是不是她更擅长改非技术性的啊,给我硬生生改出来三页= =我自己又压缩了下
然后我放到 Monster  ...

哇塞,那看起来是不是应该牛逼了不少, 你给他提要求了吗,我提了几个,不知道他会不会做.
另外,monster里面怎么测评啊,需要花钱么,我也想试试。。
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stephaniefan 发表于 2015-6-4 08:55:29 | 显示全部楼层
datoumimi 发表于 2015-6-4 06:24
哇塞,那看起来是不是应该牛逼了不少, 你给他提要求了吗,我提了几个,不知道他会不会做.. From 1point 3acres bbs
另外,monste ...

其实我简历的项目描述她没怎么改就是把很多东西都放上去了但是我觉得太多了还是删了。。。我没提具体要求就描述了一下职位方向什么的~. 1point 3acres 璁哄潧
那个是 monster 发的邮件给我的, 不要钱,我也就顺便点了链接进去上传了下简历~
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hzxerh 发表于 2016-2-3 11:25:22 | 显示全部楼层
calalia 发表于 2015-5-28 01:57
我在fiverr上改的

是一个HR 兼职改简历 改的挺好哒

求一个改简历的联系方式!超级感谢!
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