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lb1356430 发表于 2015-9-1 12:35:46 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式

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“Women aren’t suited for such hard subjects,” my friend Seung-woo told me with a smug smile. Seung-woo didn’t think that mathematics was a field for women. Although he was my age and wasn’t tied down by most traditional beliefs, he believed that only men could be true mathematicians. The majority of people in my country, South Korea, believe the gender stereotype that women are inherently inferior to men in mathematics. I strongly disagree with this outdated notion. Women are just as capable of outstanding mathematical achievement as men, and I am determined to help disprove gender stereotypes through my example.


  Mathematics has always given me a deep sense of satisfaction. Even in elementary school, I was attracted to the precision and logic inherent in mathematical formulas. I devoured as much mathematical information as I could, collecting theorems of mathematicians such as Gauss and Euclid like other students collected stamps. I had the opportunity to test my skills and knowledge in high school, when I competed in several national math competitions, including the Korea Mathematical Olympiad. My strong showing in these venues, along with my top math grades and perfect math score on the Korean SAT, bolstered my confidence in my abilities. I was proud to prove to others that I was capable of performing at the highest levels.. from: 1point3acres.com/bbs


  Despite my strong interest and achievement in mathematics, it has been difficult for me to realize my potential due to the Korean educational system, which emphasizes cramming for tests instead of critical understanding. More significantly, Korean social biases against women in the fields of math and science have discouraged me from pursuing my love of mathematics. Thus, I want to study in the United States, where I will be able follow my dream without these constraints. For about a year, I have taken English language courses at a university in Washington, D.C., where I have gained a glimpse of American academic life from the inside. I am very impressed by American students’ devotion to their studies and the system’s ability to support each student’s goals. I am therefore especially interested in attending Boston College, which, in addition to offering outstanding math and science courses, is renowned for its emphasis on cultivating students’ full development, or "cura personalis." At Boston College, I will be able to focus on my goal of becoming an excellent mathematician..鐣欏璁哄潧-涓浜-涓夊垎鍦


  I am determined to succeed, but I know that I must overcome many challenges. Sometimes, when I feel discouraged by the obstacles I face as a Korean woman in mathematics, I imagine what my life will be like ten years from now. Armed with a Boston College degree, I will visit my old friend Seung-woo. We will have corresponded over the years, so he’ll already know about the many mathematics articles published in my name, and he will be well aware of the international acclaim they received. I will savor the day when Seung-woo admits that I was correct in believing that I could succeed as a mathematician. I will be proud to know that partly due to my achievements, the door to increased opportunities for women in math and science has swung open a little bit wider.
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Jasmine_SJTU 发表于 2015-9-1 16:03:34 | 显示全部楼层
楼主能不能写一下推荐理由或者来源,不然不确定质量好不好不敢参考
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JoanDou 发表于 2015-9-2 09:11:26 | 显示全部楼层
对哦,顶楼上。建议LZ写一写来源和推荐理由~

看了下,里面有些比较明显的语法错误。比如“ where I will be able follow my dream without these constraints.”

一些读起来不太舒服的搭配,比如“overcome many challenges”。 overcome obstacles/ 是不是比较好?. 鐣欏鐢宠璁哄潧-涓浜╀笁鍒嗗湴
. visit 1point3acres.com for more.
还有些表述也需要支撑。。。比如“Despite my strong interest and achievement in mathematics
个人觉得achievement还是挺牛逼的一个词,如果其他证据(研究成果等)不足以辅助证明这个词,就有点夸大了。。。
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growinghi 发表于 2015-10-14 14:52:11 | 显示全部楼层
唔。。。好像讲故事的说
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