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[文书-求改] 统计 PS 2.0求批。。感觉写的略少了

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Psycho 发表于 2015-11-30 21:33:32 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式

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看了一下别人写的发现自己写的有点直。。上来就是按照why statistics why your program why me写完了。。然后无关的统统没列感觉就像没多少事例的样子。这篇是拿哥大的目标学校写的。-google 1point3acres
. From 1point 3acres bbs
After considering my aptitude and the type ofthe work that I like to do, I am convinced that I want to take up a dataanalysis career in Statistics. My immediate objective is to pursue a M.A. inStatistics. Either in class or during research, I strive to shape myself toreach the requirement.
I find Data Extraction and Data Visualizationthe most appealing area of Statistics and Data Science because of their manybeautiful results together with their numerous applications to real-lifeproblems. In the first semester as a SOPhomore, I committed to the projectsupported by National Natural Science Foundation of China, a research regardingthe mechanism of interrelation between the capital of board, the degree ofinternationalization and performance of enterprise. With my professor’s help,we collected information of Chinese listed company and achieved businessanalysis. This led to an inclination towards Data analytics. I am fascinated withthe enormous potential for research in these area that is what I envisagemyself doing a decade from now. I am convinced that such a career would beperfect fit for me. career objective
Keeping in mind my long-term goals, myimmediate objective is to work towards a Master in Statistics. In the secondsemester as a junior, I took the course Data Mining and was required toaccomplish the project, built the networking analysis of Shanghaitransportation system. I was supposed to extract data from the website byvirtue of Python and transfer it into adjacent matrix by R language. Complicatedprogramming was an obstacle although I have learned several software through avariety of in-course work such as R, Python, Matlab. I found the data involvedwith millions of elements, indicated that using R package would cause someunintended problems and thus may not fit in this project. I established thespecific method to construct matrix and obtain the visualization result byvirtue of R programming. Finally I got the highest possible grade (100/100) butI have realized that while I have learned great skills and developed strongrelationships and a basic understanding of what I want to do in the future,what I learned from my undergraduate classes is limited for practical uses orspecialized research. The master’s program at your university would help megain exposure to multi-dimensional training. I am captivated by itsinterdisciplinary curriculum and distinguished faculty. I am extremelyenthusiastic about your appropriate courses such as Data Mining and StatMachine Learning. Cross-register for classes at Computer Science and DataScience also leads to an inclination towards your program. I perceive that itwould provide me extensive statistical capacity and strengthen my computerprogramming ability. Why your program
My favor for science was inculcated from myschool days. So I chose Applied Mathematics with the track in FinancialMathematics as my major after College Entrance Examination. Nevertheless, comparedwith financial study, I perceive that mathematical field is more fascinating. Havingbeen exposed to the various facets of Applied Mathematics in the courseMathematical Model in the second semester as a sophomore, I have found Modelingfield most intellectually satisfying and stimulating. In my junior year, Iselected a variety of major courses such as data mining, stochastic process,multivariate statistics analysis and etc. I alsoparticipated in 2015 Interdisciplinary Contest in Modeling and was designatedas Honorable Mention. Itprovides me with a strong and comprehensive background in Mathematics andStatistics. After dedicated to my major study, my junior GPA is 89.3/100 andmajor GPA is 86.5/100. (这段是解释一下GPA,因为我的overall比较低major的比较高)
In short, I believe that a good graduateprogram is an essential step for realizing my professional ambition of becominga competent statistical analyst. I also believe that I possess the motivation,intellectual ability and preparation to do justice to a demanding graduateprogram. My undergraduate record and my high GRE scores are testimony to that.Besides, my experience of modeling and programming is also a good proof of myanalytic skills and problem-solving ability. I believe with my greatest willinglearn, your program would prepare me for a stat-related career in thisever-changing world.
I, therefore, look forward to joining yourdepartment as a graduate student.



nipeike 发表于 2015-12-1 10:22:03 | 显示全部楼层
我也是申请统计哒!看了你的PS,感觉自己的PS还有一定的修改空间!你的data mining 经历那块,我有点没看懂: I established the specific method to construct matrix and obtain the visualization result by virtue of R programming. Finally I got the highest possible grade (100/100) but I have realized that while I have learned great skills and developed strong relationships and a basic understanding of what I want to do in the future,what I learned from my undergraduate classes is limited for practical uses or specialized research. 这句话我不是很理解(1)specific method,是不是需要说明到底是啥method...(2)possible grade(100/100)这个我没懂,是正确率吗?吻合度吗?好吧是我太弱了我并不知道是啥。。。(3)(100/100)后面的话,感觉有点长了,作者是不是可以稍微修改一下表达方式年~希望能够和你多多交流~!
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nipeike 发表于 2015-12-1 10:26:41 | 显示全部楼层
不好意思楼主,我发现我们好像也许应该可能是认识的。。。。。。。。。
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 楼主| Psycho 发表于 2015-12-1 13:03:10 | 显示全部楼层
nipeike 发表于 2015-12-1 10:26
不好意思楼主,我发现我们好像也许应该可能是认识的。。。。。。。。。

其实是想说这门课最后拿的满分。。可能是我表达方式有问题。。话说你是,。我看了头像觉得好熟悉。。
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nipeike 发表于 2015-12-1 13:41:15 | 显示全部楼层
Psycho 发表于 2015-12-1 13:03
其实是想说这门课最后拿的满分。。可能是我表达方式有问题。。话说你是,。我看了头像觉得好熟悉。。

额。。某财的?统数的?你是数学的?我是统计的?
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 楼主| Psycho 发表于 2015-12-1 13:45:21 | 显示全部楼层
nipeike 发表于 2015-12-1 13:41
额。。某财的?统数的?你是数学的?我是统计的?

嗯。。我是数学的。。我觉得可能是以前在统数微信群里见过你的头像。。我猜。你可以加我微信sf0947
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 楼主| Psycho 发表于 2015-12-1 13:46:09 | 显示全部楼层
nipeike 发表于 2015-12-1 13:41. Waral 鍗氬鏈夋洿澶氭枃绔,
额。。某财的?统数的?你是数学的?我是统计的?

嗯。。我是数学的。。可能是以前我在统数的微信群里见过你的头像。。我猜。你可以加我微信sf0947
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