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[T-经验] 托福编辑修改经验

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mmaa 发表于 2016-11-8 17:46:03 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式

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我每周练习两篇,本来是有Native speaker朋友帮我看,但他最近工作太忙,不好意思叨扰,
在这边求批求不到,才上百度找免费批改...
找到一个特别提供托福修改的网站,收费的 还好不贵(340字, 85元)

整体感觉不错,才上来分享~

这是编辑给我的总反馈,包含模拟评分和四个面向的反馈,看到Very good心情就是好!

Score: 4/5
Organization: Very good! You had a clear introduction, body, and conclusion; however, you should try to outline your reasons in the introduction and summarize them in the conclusion.
Content: Excellent reasons and examples - well done!
Vocabulary: Good, but some awkward choices, as noted.
Grammar: Beware of errors in article usage.

其中我感觉最受用的是指出了许多awkward word choice, 例:
Also, it is difficult for students to receive these resources on their own. -> Furthermore, it is difficult for students to access these resources on their own.
First, the most important goal that student go to universities is education. -> First, the main reason students go to universities is to get an education.
另外句子开头时常重复,所以编辑改了句子也给了comments(While "but," "also," and "and" may be used to start sentences in informal writing, a replacement should be used for a more formal tone .)

改出来的样子像下方,这不是我写的,我的不公布哒

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RoyJames 发表于 2016-11-8 21:34:18 | 显示全部楼层
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还是出分之后再评价比较有说服力。曾经在某宝找机构改托福改了三篇对方一直觉得只能拿26,实考完29
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