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hanss 发表于 2018-9-14 21:04:45 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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题目: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Life without a friend is like sailing without a compass. A good friendship gives people clear directions when they are facing complicated uncertainties. When it comes to friendship, some people prefer to the ability of maintaining a friendship with a group of people for a long period. On the other hand, others are more likely to make new friends in the whole life. From my own perspective, I believe it is a rush to decide which ability of friend making is better, because that the combination of both is what we need.
Firstly, it's universally acknowledged that old friends are a colony of people who know you well. Thus, there is no denying the fact that there will be a easy and comfortable atmosphere to spend leisure time with them for we do not need to cater to their taste. To illustrate, my high school roommate Ali, also my primary school classmates, is a ten-year friend to me. It takes me long time and hard work to maintain this relationship, such as going for shopping, watching movies together on vacations. Therefore, she is my favorite friend during my high school period. It is comfortable to be with her that she is able to understand what I mean just by observing my face emotions.
On the other hand, new friends would enlarge your social circle and give you a hand when you are in trouble. It's obvious that everyone has their unique characters and abilities. Making new friends easily means that you have more possibilities to know their special skills. Take my father as an example, he is a warm-hearted and honest man, with a charming outlook, which contributes to his unbelievable ability to make friends with others. He is capable to extend his social circle whenever he comes to a new environment. As a result, we have no difficulties when we want to do something because my father can ask his friends for a favor. For example, when my sister has something wrong with her stomach, my father asks his doctor friend for help, then my sister soon becomes healthy after a series of advice and treatment.
Above all, we can indicate that neither of the abilities is superior than the other. Assuming that we are not able to make new friends, we will be trapped in our old social of friends. At the same time, without the ability to keep our old friends, we cannot obtain a profound friendship with other people, which means an unreliable individual. For example, there is a clever girl in my English class who is more mature than most of us. What impressed me most is that she always changes her friends, since whenever I meet her on campus, the girl's company is not the same one as the last one. As time goes on, our classmates regard her as an unreliable and vain kid. Thus, it is the only way for us to be happy is that we can integrate the two abilities.
To some degree, friendship is of essential importance to a man's happiness in his live. Based on this goal, there are arduous works for us to do in order to understand friendship. To achieve this goal, it is high time that we should to use the two abilities that mentioned before and keep working on it.

还有不到一个月就考试了,求问一下各位如何针对性的提高一下,现有水平应该就是fair20左右吧,25+应该如何修改呢,希望得到大家的意见,谢谢各位指点

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TimoTolkki 发表于 2018-9-15 00:36:21 | 显示全部楼层
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用grammarly查一下语法错吧,有几个语法错,谷歌grammarly就好了。
比如superior已经有更的意思了,所以不能用than,只能用superior to
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 楼主| hanss 发表于 2018-9-14 21:05:48 | 显示全部楼层
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粘贴过来的时候排版有点问题,看起来好密,实在不好意思
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 楼主| hanss 发表于 2018-9-15 09:33:29 | 显示全部楼层
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TimoTolkki 发表于 2018-9-15 00:36
用grammarly查一下语法错吧,有几个语法错,谷歌grammarly就好了。
比如superior已经有更的意思了,所以不 ...

好的呢~谢谢指点
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