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ellendong 发表于 2013-12-4 11:11:15 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式

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背景:之前一直帮教授做项目,断断续续也大半年了。今天想到了就让教授帮我写封推荐信了,于是我先把自己的第一版的PS发给他,他觉得不太好,给了我一些建议。就这么一直修改到12月,我又把自己的一些背景信息发过去,他追问了我的学习成绩,想要给我一些further advice.然后就催生了这封邮件:

you have a good chance with your test scores. The rest is now pure luck.  I hope to see you in person and work on many projects together with you in the future.

Let me know what you want me to do.


我对最后一句话比较懊恼……

目前草拟的回复是:
Dear XX:

  Thanks for your encouragement! You are the one who inspire me to delve into the field of education. Your support and recognition mean a lot to me.
   The first time I arrived in XX, I knew it is my dream. My time in XX is overwhelmingly rewarding. If I have the chance to be enrolled into LDT and dug deeper in digital learning and related areas, I would be delighted. Of course, I am looking forward to working for you on SMILE and other projects in the future.
   Currently, I am applying 4 universities in USA including, XX,XX,XX,XX. I was wondering whether you could write me a strong recommendation.  I believe your recommendation will help me be outstanding among various applicants.

  Thanks in advance for your time and assistance. I will keep my finger crossed:)
Best,

Ellen


serensunny 发表于 2013-12-4 11:14:04 | 显示全部楼层
多么好啊~. 鐣欏鐢宠璁哄潧-涓浜╀笁鍒嗗湴
为什么要懊恼呢?
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 楼主| ellendong 发表于 2013-12-4 11:15:17 | 显示全部楼层
Dear XX:

Thanks for your encouragement! You are the one who inspires me to delve into the field of education. Your support and recognition mean a lot to me.   

The first time I arrived in XX, I knew it is my dream. My time in XX has been overwhelmingly rewarding. If I have the chance to be enrolled into LDT and dug deeper in digital learning and related areas, I would be delighted. Of course, I am looking forward to working for you on SMILE and other projects in the future.   

Currently, I am applying 4 universities in the USA including, XX, XX, XX, XX. With your permission, I will list you as one of my referrers. I believe your recommendation will help me be outstanding among numerous applicants. Thanks in advance for your time and assistance. I will keep my finger crossed:) 鏉ユ簮涓浜.涓夊垎鍦拌鍧.

Best,

Ellen
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 楼主| ellendong 发表于 2013-12-4 11:16:41 | 显示全部楼层

看下面这篇吧……

就是心虚,我觉得其实我没有那么qualify啦,所以也不知道怎么提要求比较好。。
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grzrbk 发表于 2013-12-4 11:21:52 | 显示全部楼层
dug是过去式,应该是dig吧?If I have the chance to be enrolled into LDT and dug deeper in digital learning and related areas, I would be delighted...这个would不知道什么意思,你明显没有用虚拟语气,最好是will.applying 4 universities ...apply to? help me be outstanding 有些awkward,stand out 会不会更好?
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 楼主| ellendong 发表于 2013-12-4 11:36:47 | 显示全部楼层

谢谢楼上,已经修正!

Dear XX:

Thanks for your encouragement! You are the one who inspires me to delve into the field of education. Your support and recognition mean a lot to me.   

The first time I arrived in XX, I knew it is my dream. My time in XX has been overwhelmingly rewarding. If I have the chance to be enrolled into LDT and to dig deeper in digital learning and related areas, I will be delighted. Of course, I am looking forward to working for you on SMILE and other projects in the future.   
. visit 1point3acres.com for more.
Currently, I will apply 4 universities in the USA including, XX, XX, XX, XX. With your permission, I will list you as one of my referrers. I believe your recommendation will help me stand out among numerous applicants. Thanks in advance for your time and assistance. I will keep my finger crossed:)

Best,

Ellen
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真威武 发表于 2013-12-13 12:05:20 | 显示全部楼层
I will keep my finger crossed
. 1point 3acres 璁哄潧这句话是什么意思啊?求解
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大大棒棒糖 发表于 2013-12-13 12:30:21 | 显示全部楼层
真威武 发表于 2013-12-13 12:05 . From 1point 3acres bbs
I will keep my finger crossed
这句话是什么意思啊?求解

为你祈祷的意思。。。
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