sop第一版 刚写完，求狠拍，IC engine 方向，感觉有点啰嗦

frozenben 发表于 2014-8-22 14:42
语法上的错误仔细检查下就好了。
关键是我感觉读起来别扭啊，文章表达不清楚。是不是句子太长了，试试多断 ...

恩恩，是有这样的毛病，也许G T作文没有预期的分数和这有关系。。。

brian1118 发表于 2014-8-22 13:52
說實話，這個sop太多缺點可以挑了，樓主還是花錢找個編輯改改

。。。我自己先把语法问题改改吧。。

说到自学能力和与同学一起做的项目的时候 也许应该更加强调自己在其中做的事情  用什么语言改进了什么算法之类的

I was born in a family that both my parentsare mechanical engineers, maybe due to the influence of my parents. I am alwaysinterested in the theory behind everyday objects, the factors that play a rolein the outcome of mechanic.
  

i was born in a family WHERE my parents are both mechanical engineers ,maybe due to the influence of my parents, i HAVE ALWAYS BEEN interested ....我就看了第一句 觉得就有点小问题 多找几个老师 外教改改吧...我也是申请ME呢 加油哈~

欲风念 发表于 2014-8-23 10:40
I was born in a family that both my parentsare mechanical engineers, maybe due to the influence of m ...

现在基本上在重写。。。。。加油哈

时态时态！