第一封套磁信 求狠批

求狠批 我已经发出去了 还有一些没套   求大家批一下亡羊补牢
Dear professor XX，
     I am a college student from XX in China and I am willing to apply for PHD program in University of XX. I am eager to further my research on data science.
     In the last two years, my research mainly focused on XX, especially sparse representation and particle filter. Until now,  I already have one publication in XX and am writing another paper for a higher standard Journal.  In my paper in XX, I proposed a new mathematical model with XXX and proved that it is more accurate and efficient than most popular models.  I am expected to graduate and get a B.S.degree from the department of Electronics and Information Engineering in 2015.  
     The attached document is my resume and I sincerely hope you can give me a chance to study in your research group, expecially the Institute for data science.
     Thank you for your time to read this letter and look forward for your reply .

" I proposed a new mathematical model with XXX and proved that it is more accurate and efficient than most popular models"
好厉害...

" I proposed a new mathematical model with XXX and proved that it is more accurate and efficient than most popular models"
太厉害了。。。顶会的水平。。。

硕士学历应该M.S. 还是楼主是本科生？正在陶瓷的路过

楼主这个陶瓷有回复么。。。