求改PS，CS PhD

项目明确，要求max 1 page的motivation；
借鉴了网上挺多sample，请大家指教：

Motivation

Applying for: Ph.D. of staticanalysis and automated testing for dynamic programming languages

My decision to apply for this Ph.D.program in Aarhus University is driven by my willingness to extend my researchfrom testing and analysis of static typed programming languages to dynamiclanguages. It followed naturally after carefully considering my researchinterests, my research and academic background, and my long-term professionalgoal, which is to pursue a research career as a teaching faculty member.

I had always been fascinated by thefield of programming languages. During my undergraduate studies, my teacher ofthe Operating System course, Prof. Xiaohong Liu suggested me to learn morelanguages to better understand the design of them, so afterwards I triedseveral programming languages in my hobby projects, such as Java, Python, Ruby,Lisp and JavaScript, and the popular Objective-C during my internship in MobsonTechnology. These experiences made me think about the advantages and drawbacksof programming languages brought to the developers and the code they wrote,which is why I joined the Unit Automated Testing (UAT) research group whoseresearch focused on program analysis and testing. As an assistant, I had somehands-on experience in test case generation and evaluation, such as codecoverage calculation, interval computation and feasible path generation. I alsoindependently designed the Coverage Calculation Module in UAT system. Withthese practical experiences, I became more familiar with and interested insoftware testing and analysis, which encouraged me to pursue a further study inthis field.

When I got into graduate school, Itook my research further from automated testing to analysis of static typedlanguages. I joined the Defect Testing System (DTS) group led by Prof. YunzhanGong and Prof. Dahai Jin, in which I directly participated in the developmentof the model checking framework in DTS and gained some first-hand experience indeep semantic analysis. Then the great amount of warnings (with falsepositives) reported during the integration testing of DTS made it intuitive forme to ask: is there a way to reduce the number of warnings needed to bediagnosed? In later research, I worked with Dr. Dalin Zhang and proposedseveral approaches which were simple yet effective and several papers aboutthem were published or going to be published. We correlated and classifiedsimilar warnings so that developers could diagnose these warnings together.During the pattern mining process, worthless patterns or pattern explosionsmight occur, so I set a threshold to eliminate those patterns with littlesupport. These works brought me experiences in software engineering, but alsomade me aware of the lag in research in my Chinese university that greatlystrengthened my resolve to research abroad at the cutting edge of programanalysis and software testing.

My education in Beijing Universityof Posts and Telecommunications, one of the Chinese national ”211 Project”universities ranking top 20 for its Computer Science program among 663 Chineseuniversities, has provided me a solid and comprehensive background in ComputerScience. The curriculum included all the basic courses, such as Data Structuresand Algorithms, Compilers, Databases, etc. Due to my excellent performance ofundergraduate study, I was selected as a candidate for a master degree waivingentrance exams. By the influence of my mother, who used to be a teacher inmathematics, I have actively participated in teaching assistantships. I helpedto design and accept experiments for the course ”Principles of Communications”of the School of Computer Science. I also instructed about 160 students in anintroductory course ”Introduction to Computing and Programming” conducted byLecturer Yanmei Zhang, in which I found great satisfaction and happiness thatled to my determination to become a teaching faulty member in the future.

In many of my side projects, I tendto use Python, Ruby or JavaScript, which makes me think of applying my researchto those languages. In the future, I would like to continue my research onstatic analysis and software testing more on dynamic programming languages,which is quite challenging since they do late binding and are dynamically typedso that we cannot make sure which method to execute or what type of a variableis without running the program. This Ph.D. program of static analysis andautomated testing for dynamic programming languages suits me very well. Anotherreason for me to apply this program is that Center for Advanced SoftwareAnalysis (CASA) of Aarhus University has a good reputation for its research andit also focuses on web programming which I am very interested in and have doneseveral hobby projects such as a website like Google Translate. Moreover, yourwelcome of students with diverse cultures and backgrounds is another veryimportant factor for my choice.

Ilook forward to making contributions to CASA at Aarhus University and hope todevelop myself as a competent professional.

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最后是这么个感觉，是不是太密密麻麻了。。

补充内容 (2013-10-24 17:58):
怎么搞了两张图...

I My decision to apply for this Ph.D.program in Aarhus University because I want is driven by my willingness to extend my research from testing and analysis of static typed programming languages to dynamic languages(这第一句，想一想，是不是所有的applicant都可以这样写？其实说白了就是废话，我们都知道你为什么申请这个Ph.D). It followed naturally after carefully considering my researchinterests, my research and academic background, and my long-term professional goal, which is to pursue a research career as a teaching faculty member.

I had always been am fascinated by the field of programming languages. As an undergraduate, I am eager to understand the design of programming languages that I embeded During my undergraduate studies, my teacher ofthe Operating System course, Prof. Xiaohong Liu suggested me to learn morelanguages to better understand the design of them, so afterwards I triedseveral programming languages in my hobby projects, such as(你老师的建议啥都不算，关键是你自己要对这个东西有兴趣。 Does not add any value) Java, Python, Ruby,Lisp and JavaScript, and the popular Objective-C into several projects I have worked on during my internship in MobsonTechnology. Through practicing those languages, I started to These experiences made me think about the advantages and drawbacksof programming languages brought to the developers and the code they wrote. In a bid to solve those problems, ,which is why I joined the Unit Automated Testing (UAT) research group whose research focused on program analysis and testing. As an assistant, I had somehands-on experience in test case generation and evaluation, such as code coverage calculation, interval computation and feasible path generation. I alsoindependently designed the Coverage Calculation Module in UAT system. Withthese practical experiences, I became more familiar with and interested insoftware testing and analysis, which encouraged me to pursue a further study inthis field.(这里感觉好空，觉得要写得非常具体才好，比如那件小事激起你的interests in software testing. personally, 我觉得SOP里，你做过什么并不重要，重要的是你做过的这些事情怎么shape现在你的？)

When I got into graduate school, I took my research further from automated testing to analysis of static typed languages. I joined the Defect Testing System (DTS) group led by Prof. YunzhanGong and Prof. Dahai Jin, in which I directly participated in the developmentof the model checking framework in DTS and gained some first-hand experience indeep semantic analysis. Then the great amount of warnings (with falsepositives) reported during the integration testing of DTS made it intuitive for me to ask: is there a way to reduce the number of warnings needed to be diagnosed?（这里我觉得是很好的一个例子，只是为什么要写something made me think? 你对一件事情感兴趣，就会忍不住去钻研，并不需要something makes you think。简单的例子，你喜欢一个女生就会自己跑去研究她的星座，爱好是不是？可是如果一个你不怎么喜欢的女生多看了你一眼，你是不是才开始思考：她是不是喜欢我？个人觉得你如果用I开始做句子，会让你显得更自信：I started to wonder if there is a way to reduce the number of warnings needed to be diagnosed.） In later research, I worked with Dr. Dalin Zhang and proposed several approaches which were simple yet effective and several papers about them were published or about going to be published. We correlated and classified similar warnings so that developers could diagnose these warnings together.During the pattern mining process, to prevent worthless patterns or pattern explosions might  from occuring, so I set a threshold to eliminate those patterns with little support. These works brought me experiences in software engineering, but also made me aware of the lag in research in my Chinese university that greatly strengthened my resolve to research abroad at the cutting edge of programanalysis and software testing(同前面理由：I became aware of the lag in research between China and the US so I resolved to ....).

My education in Beijing Universityof Posts and Telecommunications, one of the Chinese national ”211 Project”universities ranking top 20 for its Computer Science program among 663 Chineseuniversities, has provided me a solid and comprehensive background in ComputerScience. The curriculum included all the basic courses, such as Data Structuresand Algorithms, Compilers, Databases, etc.(感觉这两句话doesnt add any value) Due to my excellent performance of undergraduate study, I was selected as a candidate for a master degree waiving entrance exams. By the influence of my mother, who used to be a teacher in mathematics, I have actively participated in teaching assistantships.(这跟前面保研怎么衔接呢？) I helped to design and accept experiments for the course ”Principles of Communications”of the School of Computer Science. I also instructed about 160 students in an introductory course ”Introduction to Computing and Programming” conducted byLecturer Yanmei Zhang, in which I found great satisfaction and happiness that led to my determination to become a teaching faulty member in the future.（这个地方写你喜欢教学，建议成一段，做成你对未来规划的样子：受妈妈的影响，一直都很喜欢教学，以后计划一边学术研究，一边teach）

In many of my side projects, I tendto use Python, Ruby or JavaScript, which makes me think of applying my researchto those languages.（you have to stop over-using this structure） In the future, I would like to continue my research on static analysis and software testing more on dynamic programming languages,which is quite challenging since they do late binding and are dynamically typed so that we cannot make sure which method to execute or what type of a variableis without running the program. This Ph.D. program of static analysis and automated testing for dynamic programming languages suits me very well. Another reason for me to apply this program is that Center for Advanced SoftwareAnalysis (CASA) of Aarhus University has a good reputation for its research andit also focuses on web programming which I am very interested in and have done several hobby projects such as a website like Google Translate. Moreover, your welcome of students with diverse cultures and backgrounds is another very important factor for my choice.

Ilook forward to making contributions to CASA at Aarhus University and hope todevelop myself as a competent professional.

建议整理成两部分：对研究这块东西的兴趣及你的potential（包括你学的东西，做的项目，实习等）+以后的规划（研究教学）
对于选这个学校的原因，写得好general,没啥亮点哈
都是个人意见，仅仅参考哈。同申请，祝好运！

顺其自然123 发表于 2013-10-24 18:32
I My decision to apply for this Ph.D.program in Aarhus University because I  ...

非常感谢，非常有价值的建议！我也认为句子写的太长了，特别爱用从句，要好好改改~再次感谢！

校友！

去丹麦吗…不来CMU陪基友们吗XDD

补充内容 (2013-11-23 03:50):
有很多说明性的语句可以考虑去掉。（我个人不申PHD 难以给出细节意见）《——例如这种句子。

NicklX 发表于 2013-11-23 03:48
校友！

去丹麦吗…不来CMU陪基友们吗XDD

哇咔咔！校友！
丹麦这个灰常match啊！试试！
也想去CMU啊！但是估计去不了啊～申着其他的呢～

rkk 发表于 2013-11-29 22:19
哇咔咔！校友！
丹麦这个灰常match啊！试试！
也想去CMU啊！但是估计去不了啊～申着其他的呢～

加油加油！

不过CMU的PhD嘛 - -。

如果说CMU的MS就和ASU一样，
那么CMU的PhD还是顶尖的- -

Motivation

Applying for: Ph.D. of staticanalysis and automated testing for dynamic programming languages

My decision to apply for this Ph.D.program in Aarhus University is driven by my willingness to extend my researchfrom testing and analysis of static typed programming languages to dynamiclanguages. It followed naturally after carefully considering my researchinterests, my research and academic background, and my long-term professionalgoal, which is to pursue a research career as a teaching faculty member. （开头少了点，开头你可以用一个hook来抓住眼球啊，或者写个牛逼的经历把ao吓住）

I had always been fascinated by thefield of programming languages. During my undergraduate studies, my teacher ofthe Operating System course（没必要说你教授搞os的，反而矛盾）, Prof. Xiaohong Liu suggested me to learn morelanguages to better understand the design of them, so afterwards I triedseveral programming languages in my hobby projects, such as Java, Python, Ruby,Lisp and JavaScript, and the popular Objective-C during my internship in MobsonTechnology. These experiences made me think about the advantages and drawbacksof programming languages brought to the developers and the code they wrote,which is why I joined the Unit Automated Testing (UAT) research group whoseresearch focused on program analysis and testing. As an assistant, I had somehands-on experience in test case generation and evaluation, such as codecoverage calculation, interval computation and feasible path generation. I alsoindependently designed the Coverage Calculation Module in UAT system. Withthese practical experiences, I became more familiar with and interested insoftware testing and analysis, which encouraged me to pursue a further study inthis field.（能不能具体点，感觉很空，然后跳的很厉害）

When I got into graduate school, Itook my research further from automated testing to analysis of static typedlanguages. I joined the Defect Testing System (DTS) group led by Prof. YunzhanGong and Prof. Dahai Jin, in which I directly participated in the developmentof the model checking framework in DTS and gained some first-hand experience indeep semantic analysis. Then the great amount of warnings (with falsepositives) reported during the integration testing of DTS made it intuitive forme to ask: is there a way to reduce the number of warnings needed to bediagnosed? In later research, I worked with Dr. Dalin Zhang and proposedseveral approaches which were simple yet effective and several papers aboutthem were published or going to be published. We correlated and classifiedsimilar warnings so that developers could diagnose these warnings together.During the pattern mining process, worthless patterns or pattern explosionsmight occur, so I set a threshold to eliminate those patterns with littlesupport. These works brought me experiences in software engineering, but alsomade me aware of the lag in research in my Chinese university that greatlystrengthened my resolve to research abroad at the cutting edge of programanalysis and software testing.（这里能不能明确的说下research体现了你啥品质）

My education in Beijing Universityof Posts and Telecommunications, one of the Chinese national ”211 Project”universities ranking top 20 for its Computer Science program among 663 Chineseuniversities这里不用浪费文字说你是北邮的很牛逼，简历呀，档案上面都用，PS不是体现学校牛逼的地方，用这么长一句话太浪费字数了，你最多简短的说Graduating from one of the top Chinese university之类的, has provided me a solid and comprehensive background in ComputerScience. The curriculum included all the basic courses, such as Data Structuresand Algorithms, Compilers, Databases谁家CS不学这个？要体现你的特色，不要说一些所有申请者共同的事情, etc. Due to my excellent performance ofundergraduate study, I was selected as a candidate for a master degree waivingentrance exams担心美国人不太懂这个，不是很有说的必要，实在要说，可以试试看admission to the BS MS combined program？. By the influence of my mother, who used to be a teacher inmathematics, I have actively participated in teaching assistantships. I helpedto design and accept experiments for the course ”Principles of Communications”of the School of Computer Science. I also instructed about 160 students in anintroductory course ”Introduction to Computing and Programming” conducted byLecturer Yanmei Zhang, in which I found great satisfaction and happiness thatled to my determination to become a teaching faulty member in the future.（上面那些简历里面有的删了吧，把这个TA的经历说详细点，比如开始很怕，后来很牛逼之类的）

In many of my side projects, I tendto use Python, Ruby or JavaScript, which makes me think of applying my researchto those languages直接说research specialization是programming language吧，这样感觉怪怪的，好像天天研究python好不好用一样. In the future, I would like to continue my research onstatic analysis and software testing more on dynamic programming languages,which is quite challenging since they do late binding and are dynamically typedso that we cannot make sure which method to execute or what type of a variableis without running the program. This Ph.D. program of static analysis andautomated testing for dynamic programming languages suits me very well. Anotherreason for me to apply this program is that Center for Advanced SoftwareAnalysis (CASA) of Aarhus University has a good reputation for its research andit also focuses on web programming which I am very interested in and have doneseveral hobby projects such as a website like Google Translate. Moreover, yourwelcome of students with diverse cultures and backgrounds is another veryimportant factor for my choice.

Ilook forward to making contributions to CASA at Aarhus University and hope todevelop myself as a competent professional.

感觉你的结构有点点奇怪，先讲了research，然后跳掉了，然后又开始讲research 的方向，你两个离的近点会不会好点？

写得略长啊~

萌神考拉哥 发表于 2013-12-31 14:34
写得略长啊~

嗯，改了一下，出了400和600两个版本～