CV 求修改意见，有大米！CS master 图像或视觉方向

CV 求轻拍，本人准备申请cs的master，感兴趣的方向是computer graphics和computer vision. 但是cv里的项目经历不知如何取舍，其实只要删除一点点就可以压缩到一页了

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Education Background
2011.09 – now          Undergraduate in Fudan University              Softwareengineering       GPA: 3.47 / 4.0
2013.08 – 2013.12    Exchange in National University of Singapore     Computer Science    GPA:   4.0 / 5.0
Research and Projects
2013.12 – now        Computer Vision lab, Fudan University
Did research about objecttracking, and submitted a paper[1] as a co-author – review still in progress.
2014.07 – 2014.09  ShanghaiTechUniversity
Did a project under the supervision of Professor Hao Chen[2] about mobile advertising: analyzing the use and success of advertising libraries in Androidapplications.
2014.09 – 2014.09  Contemporary Undergraduate Mathematical Contest in Modeling (CUMCM)
Built a mathematical model of acreative folding table, which simulates the changing shape of the board.
2013.01 –2013.05  iShamroock Software Competition
Made a puzzlegame for Android phone in a team of three people.
2012.05– 2013.05  Fudan’s Undergraduate Research Opportunities Program  
Researchedabout defending stream media from DDOS attack; my task was to analyze possiblevulnerabilities in the RTSP protocol, which is used a lot by stream media.
Other projects
Implemented a simple Unix-like file system withcommand-line interface, which handles file block allocation and management.
Made an Android application for http://www.travelhub.cn/ (teamwork, my task was to interact with the web services).
Made an equipment loan system in SQL (https://github.com/Tiotao/Abbey-Equipment-Management-System,teamwork, my task was database structure design).
Awards
2nd Runner-up of iShamroockSoftware Competition, 2013.
Second prize of Scholarship forOutstanding Student at Fudan University, 2012.
Excellent League Member of FudanUniversity, 2013.
Working Experience
2014.09 – now        Working as a QA intern in Splunk – startup company specializing in big data
Skills
Familiar with Java, knowledge in python,Matlab, C++, C, OpenGL and SketchUp.
Fluent inboth oral and written English, basic knowledge of French.
Extracurricular Activities
2012.07 – 2012.08  Went to Guangxi Province for summer teaching activity,granted by Shanghai University Summer Outstanding Activity Practice Project (I was in charge ofthe sports class).
2012.09 – 2013.01  Teacher assistant of Software Engineering faculty.
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[1] Studying Collective Behaviours of Drosophila melanogaster via ThreeDimensional Video Tracking – in Journal of the Royal Society Interface scientific reports

[2] http://www.cs.ucdavis.edu/~hchen/

助教可以单拿出来列一项“Teaching Experience”，社会实践那个申CS的话其实没什么用，可以考虑删掉。还有最好把T和G的成绩也都写上

研究经历中用的动词did 和made很不妥当，建议参考其他类似简历修改。
语法错误很多，谨慎怀疑你找个的那个NATIVE SPEAKER是否靠谱，或者说他认为口语可以接受的用法在正式书面文件的CV中就很不妥当。比如研究经历的第一句话就槽点满满：Did research about objecttracking, and submitted a paper[1] as a co-author – review still in progress
1：DID不合适，2. as a co-author,谁as了？前面要跟个指代”人“的名词或者代词，不能省略的。3. -review still in progress。破折号在英文中是紧挨着解释对象或者连接两个独立分句的，这里哪种用法都不是。其实你最好的修改办法是把你的PAPER单列出一部分，写清楚paper的名字，投给什么期刊或者会议了，状态是怎么样的然后替换掉那个鸡肋的课外活动。否则教授根本就不知道你的PAPER质量到底如何。

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2014.07 – 2014.09  ShanghaiTechUniversity
Did a project under the supervision of Professor Hao ...
总觉得 do a project 不太对
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Researchedabout defendin。。。
reaearch 做动词有research about sth的搭配吗？
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Teacher assistant应该是 teaching assitant 吧？

字体和格式可能因为copy上来的，比较不太好看。。。

ryanjin 发表于 2014-11-24 17:24
助教可以单拿出来列一项“Teaching Experience”，社会实践那个申CS的话其实没什么用，可以考虑删掉。还有 ...

可是申请的时候一般tg成绩都会另外填送的吗？为什么还要写上去

树精 发表于 2014-11-24 18:06
可是申请的时候一般tg成绩都会另外填送的吗？为什么还要写上去

方便看你CV的老师快速了解

我看地里有人说GT不是高到一定级别还是别写了吧

我也觉得标准化考试可以不写上，毕竟写上了，老师也会以application中填写的成绩为准。

lyleffective 发表于 2014-11-26 22:50
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2014.07 – 2014.09  ShanghaiTechUniversity
Did a project under the supervision of Professor Hao ...

其实我觉得语言应该不是什么大问题，已经找native speaker改过了，我主要想问问结构和内容有什么建议。

你的写作，语法句法再改改吧，很多不是很通顺或者不地道，祝顺利