我的第一份套磁信，大家给我看看有什么不足之处呗

Dear ······· :

Sorry to trouble you.I am looking forward to continue my further research in ·····after I read your research focus and experiences,and I think I could make some contributions to your wonderful research projects.

I am currently a undergraduate student in·······China and my major is BME.During undergraduate studies, the courses I have taken focus on medical instruments.My researches focus on:   
   (1)minimally invasive therapies for varicose veins(a paper has been accepted);
(2)brain waves testing;
(3)Usability testing for medical device user intructions based on eye tracking technology;
(4) Single-chip microcomputer program design based on NEC electronic tools
During researches,I have learned many skills for future BME research,such as designing of minimally invasive medical instruments,mathematical modeling and skills in Statistics to process the datas,programming for the electronic system.

After I read the focus of your wonderful researches,such as: the development of efficacious medical devices, minimally invasive evaluation and medical device designing for solving unmet medical need, I found that my research experience in minimally invasive medical device development matches your research.Besides,my basic knowledge of programming of single chip microcomputer might help design some electronic devices in the future. In addition,my past internship experience in a coorperation focus on designing medical devices could also help in preparing me for your wonderful researches.

Therefore, I crave for the opportunity of being a student of yours in ··········.I am a optimistic and diligent student and I enjoy engaging in researches. So I wonder whether a graduate student is welcomed in your group. I believe I can make satisfactory contributions in your research group.Besides,My CV is also in this mail. If you have any questions regarding me or researches,please feel free to contact me.Thank you so much.
         
Best Regards

Sincerely,
········
  大家狠狠地拍哦

Following is my revision, you can have a look:-）
Dear ······· :

I am currently a undergraduate student in·······China and my major is BME. My undergraduate studies focus on medicalinstruments. I am preparing to apply for the PhD/Master program of XXXUniversity and I am writing this email to ask whether your group is recruiting anincoming graduate student at 2016 Fall.

Note: Fristly, you should point out who you are, why you are writting this letter.
Every comma and dot should be followed by a blank, this is very important in formal writtings

During my undergraduatestudies, I have conducted numerous research projects, My research interestsinvolve:   
(1) MinimallyInvasive Therapies for Varicose Veins
(a paper has been accepted)
Note: Your paper information,  such as Authors, Title, journal and the date should be listed and if possible, you should attach your paper manuscript whichhas been accepted

(2) Brain Waves Testing;
(3) UsabilityTesting for Medical Device User Intructions Based on Eye Tracking Technology
(4) Single-Chip Microcomputer Program Design Based on NEC Electronic Tools

Note: You should briefly summarize what you have done in these research topics, what is your contribution and what results have you achieved. Such as, I developed a method/ System to analyse/ Measure XXX.

Duringthese research experiences, I have learned many skills for future BME research, such as designing of minimally invasive medical instruments, mathematicalmodeling and skills in Statistics to process the datas, programming for theelectronic system.

I found that my research experience inminimally invasive medical device development matches your research. Besides, mybasic knowledge of programming of single chip microcomputer might help designsome electronic devices in the future. In addition, my past internship experience in a coorperation focus on designing medical devices could also helpin preparing me for your research. . more i
I longed to joinyour group as a graduate student. Attached please find my CV. I am lookingforward to hearing from you soon.

Note: Don't simply make the conclusion that your research experience, knowledge and internship match the professor's research, you need to show how they match the professor's research.


Best Regards


XXX

velano 发表于 2015-9-19 12:57
我还担心我对于教授的科研论述的太少呢

太长了   列一下自己主要research+论文， 有对教授的研究的想法更好（具体的有内容的）  ，诸如"i learn many skills", "your wonderful research","I'm diligent and optimistic" 没必要写   你的论文列出来了，match不match，以及对你的评估，留给教授来考虑

补充内容 (2015-9-19 13:58):
关键还是具体具体具体

最近也在准备写 持续关注楼主的帖子

CallMeMonkey 发表于 2015-9-19 12:12
最近也在准备写 持续关注楼主的帖子

加油！帮我提提意见呗

太长了...第一封见面信就这么长大多数教授都没时间看的

wzy930712 发表于 2015-9-19 12:54
太长了...第一封见面信就这么长大多数教授都没时间看的

我还担心我对于教授的科研论述的太少呢

地里有一篇专门讲套磁的帖子，你可以参考一下。http://www.1point3acres.com/bbs/ ... hlight=%CC%D7%B4%C5

Meetyourmaster 发表于 2015-9-19 13:56
太长了   列一下自己主要research+论文， 有对教授的研究的想法更好（具体的有内容的）  ，诸如"i learn  ...

谢谢，我已经写出research area和paper了，这样把没有用的废话删了就可以了吧，对教授研究的理解需要自己读他们的论文吗

velano 发表于 2015-9-19 21:09
谢谢，我已经写出research area和paper了，这样把没有用的废话删了就可以了吧，对教授研究的理解需要自己 ...

学术套的话当然要读，只列一些名词远远不够， 学术套回复率高，当然，花的功夫也多，  2，3天或者快的花1天写一封学术套差不多

太长了  而且很机械
几句话就行