个人终极PS，求拍砖(本帖第二页附上了修订版的，诚邀大家继续拍砖)

回复 30# 754860166
提了一句“Participating in this project taught me more than how to build circuits and program for the DDS. Most importantly, I learned about the planing and coordination involved in building a large, multi-part system with others.”如果三个项目都不停的说积累了底层硬件的经验，对于申一些偏算法的专业不大好吧？

作者每个点都想说，但是每个点都没有说的很透~精简精简啦

回复 32# ddbear
请举例说明之

膜拜大神！大神应该去申Professor，Ms对你来说弱爆了

回复 34# zado
我又对科研部分进行了若干改写，请对以下这段提出具体的优化意见
A synchronous radar responder, which can radiate the radio wave to simulate the reflected signal in certain distance for the testing of this radar, became my recent completed project there.  It was my first time to deal with such a complex radiation system. To put forward the design for this radiation system required fully comprehension to radar system and radio wave propagation over rough sea. So I examined related vital knowledge after class despite of its physical and mental challenge during my busiest semester. The most enjoyable thing in these days was to immerse myself into a dozen of relative books and papers, such as Leslie W. Barclay’s Propagation of Radiowaves and Hamish Meikle’s Modern Radar Systems. Then I was in contemplation of the computer night after night without fatigue to complete the PCB for my design and debug the control program. The wave form in oscilloscope touched on my nerve, and brought me every exciting and depressing. Failure cannot be avoided all the time, but under Prof. B' instruction I debugged the system patiently until I was on cloud nine to see the correct wave form showing up in the oscilloscope. In this project, I  programed to generate a linear frequency-modulated continuous wave with DDS and built marching ciruit to radiate this 200-mw signal away from the antenna. It is a valuable asset in my life to undertake this biggest project ever in my work. Participating in this project taught me more than knowledge about Radio Wave Propagation and how to build circuits and program for the DDS. Most importantly, I learned although there may be considerable technical, mental, and physical challenges in a extremly difficult project, I can conquer all of them by my energy and persistence.

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回复 34# zado
关于科研的这段有何不足呢 ？

毕设经历那段建议lz最好能有点成果再写进去，否则应该一笔带过。
strong self-learning ability并不是由你选了一个本科没学过的领域体现出来的，而是由没学过但已经取得了进展／成果体现出来的（哪怕是一点小的体会，也值得写进去，会更有说服力）

先日一下这个系统。。这样乱码。在说说lz的事情：写得很一般，语言很烂，不过CS可以理解。起码写文章要语言流利，思路连贯。
解决办法两个：
1. 努力看PS, 学英语。
2. 找人写。

回复 38# dark白
那也就是说应该加上I have completed 。。。。。。这样的句子了？？可我后面加了“I am fully absorbed into the simulation picture of electromagnetic fields now”应该表明成国了啊？
另外35楼新写的科研那段如何呢？