报一下之前的 rej 攒人品。

之前收到的rej但是电脑不方便一直没有发帖报
发邮件给了小米问为啥悲剧了。。

她的回复贴在下面。大家没事饭前便后看着乐呵乐呵吧。
我觉得不出意外应该是模板。。。。

Actually, upon further review, your TOEFL is probably ok where it is, the big issue is much more that your essay doesn't reflect a native grasp of English. So this tells us that you are a very good test taker (which is good too), but not as strong of an English speaker and writer. It is the disparity between your exam score and your essay that is a red flag to reviewers.

Your essay is something you need to improve. You use many words that a native English speaker would not use.  American essays are very different from Chinese essays.  In China, a beautiful essay has soaring language and tells a long, flowing story.  Here in the US, people are in much more of a hurry to get the information they need. (This is maybe not a better way to be, but it is a cultural difference.) They want your essay to be easy to read, and use nice language but also get much more quickly to the Statistics. I would shorten your essay by at least half a page and focus much more on why you want a PhD in Statistics and why you feel that the University of Minnesota (or any other university you apply to) is the place you would like to earn it.  If it is possible, I would have a native English speaker or someone who has lived for quite a while in the US review your essay.

Here is some advice quoted from a webpage by Jim Whitehead, a Computer Science professor at UCSC. Although his advice is geared toward computer science students applying to his university in California, it is also very good for potential University of Minnesota Statistics PhD students.   http://users.soe.ucsc.edu/~ejw/advice/

Personal Statement

It should go without saying that the English in the personal statement needs to be perfect. Have a native speaker review your essay. Pay money to get such a review, if necessary. I frequently see high GRE verbal and TOEFL scores accompanied by a poorly written personal statement. This says to me that the student takes tests well, but still has problems with written English expression.

In the personal statement, I personally look for evidence that the student has the capacity to perform high quality research. Specifically, I look for evidence of critical thinking, and discussion of prior relevant research or project experience. I also like to see students make a strong case for why they are well suited for graduate study, especially at UCSC.

Many prospective students write about how they have wanted to study Computer Science since they were a small child, and how it's a lifelong dream and ambition. In extreme moderation this is fine (1-2 sentences at maximum). However, it is reasonable to assume that nearly all prospective students willing to spend the time and effort to apply to the Dept. of CS for graduate school have a deep and sincere interest in Computer Science. One deduction you can make is that spending valuable space in your personal statement on this matter does not differentiate you from the other applicants.

I personally would like to hear about the difficult aspects of some project you worked on. Tell me how you displayed excellent problem solving skills, were a leader, or showed initiative. Especially if you have done research before, tell me about that research experience, and what you learned from it. Finally, tell me why UCSC is the best place for you to study. There are many universities in the US; why is UCSC the best match for you?

Make Your Point Fast

In the preliminary review of files, the typical application receives 2-8 minutes of consideration by each faculty member that reviews it. Follow-on reviews are typically more detailed, since there are fewer files at this point. Personal statements are first scanned, then carefully read if they seem interesting. Your personal statement should ensure that the most important points are made in the first 1-2 paragraphs.

You may be thinking, "This isn't very fair. I'm going to spend hours putting together my application, only to have it reviewed very quickly." In defense of the practice, I'll make two observations. First, we receive many hundreds of applications, and must make rapid decisions on them. In order to provide timely response to applicants, each application cannot be reviewed for very long. Second, after reviewing hundreds of applications, faculty get very good at making rapid assessments of academic records. Does this mean we never make mistakes? No. It's an inherently error-prone process, since it involves making highly subjective decisions based on a small number of data points about a person's future academic abilities. Predicting the future is hard.

这里的essay指的就是PS么？好吧，原来这个是他们判断的标准之一

补充内容 (2014-2-27 19:04):
我想起来了，umn当时还要写一个关于diversity的essay

我靠，，看来真的要找人改PS了？本来还有DIY的想法来着。。

估计是Statement 2水过就被拒了

lyb342 发表于 2014-2-27 22:32
估计是Statement 2水过就被拒了

很有可能。PS2是临时网申的时候才看到然后现写的。。

zlfh0507 发表于 2014-2-27 23:40
很有可能。PS2是临时网申的时候才看到然后现写的。。

同+1.我也是先写的，估计这里出现悲剧了

学校回复的好认真啊~真卡啊

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