Without looking at the content, the format and style of it show me that you are not serious about finding a job and that attitude can reflect your lack of attention to detail even come across as disrespectful.
Also, if you want to use past tense, just stick with it. Don't throw a mix of different tenses.
I don't know much about tech recruiting, but coming from Wall Street, small things matter (consistency of bullet points, uniformed margins for each section, consistent font size, average line length, perfect spelling and grammar, etc.).
Expedia is a big plus, but in this country, first impressions matter.