不同中介的文书对比 CS项目

两个中介给我写的同一个项目描述

第一个：这个我自己修改了很多，加了很多细节，整体读下来感觉该有的信息都有了，但是感觉整体没有第二个舒服。这个中介老师估计不是计算机专业的，第一版下来的时候很糟糕，这个是我改了蛮多之后的状况
One of the most prominent projects I involved was the development of an online judging system for our university’s public programming course, where I served as a team leader. Throughout the project, I participated in the requirement analysis, architecture design, back-end code developing and solution design. Facing the challenging task of actualizing the core requirement of “Judging via Java code ”, after reviewing a lot of literature, we used xxxx to provide the basic Java code judging capability. Meanwhile, we adopted some distributed architectures to reduce the pressure on the server and some middleware to ensure the service capability of a single server. For instance, using Redis to cache the data to prevent the server from crashing, and using RocketMQ to limit the data traffic from the management side to prevent the judging system from crashing. When solving the problem of too slow loading of oversized front-end images, I figured out the solution of using Nginx for dynamic and static deployment and compressing the static file with gzip, which improved the speed of image loading from 2s to 5ms. With my strong data searching ability and learnability, I could quickly master novel tools or knowledge and apply them flexibly to the project, which allowed me to support other team members technically and enhance team cohesion to promote the project progress. Through this experience, my scenario-based system design agility was greatly honed. Meanwhile, it also struck me of the importance of understanding the principles of computer, such as computer operating systems and computer networks, as well as the importance of understanding the principles of some programming frameworks, which are the basis for system design and solving system problems.

第二个：这是初版，感觉语言整体很流畅，除了一下细节还没有加入，感觉同等的一个位置这个版本其实更好，比如核心需求的表述。lz对专业表达和名词都不太熟悉，觉得初版这个水平挺好的
I have joined in Professor xxx research group since December 2020. In this research group, I got an opportunity to participate in various projects. The most impressive one was developing xxx for College of xxx in which I acted as the team leader. This project aimed to establish an online course system for the public Basic Proment and experiment management. The most challenging problem I have encountered was how to realize Java code judgment. After consulting various mgramming course, and realized core requirement Java code judgment and secondary functions such as user management, exam manageaterials and referring to similar products, we needed to run Java in an embedded JVM environment, and deployed Docker to runtime environment. To meet the requirement of code judgment, and make sure that the system run smoothly under the use of multiple exams or experiments simultaneously, I first planned to increase Redis cache to improve the response speed of the system and reduce the load on the database. However, we found that when the Docker judgment needs to deal with the large number of task requests, the downtime may happen. To solve this problem, we used RocketMQ to limit flow to avoid excess flow, thus solving the core performance requirements. In order to ensure the capacity of the server, we separated the deployment of the management side and the judging side, which further enhanced the capacity of the system. In this project, my major responsibilities included requirement analysis, architecture design, coding business logic and providing system solutions. Thanks to the well-cooperation of our team in both the planning process and the establishment process, we achieved a great result. In this process, I cultivated my abilities in communicating and coordinating through discussing with team members and promoting interpersonal harmony.

鱿鱼lz对CS的一下专业英语表达不太熟悉，麻烦地里各位老哥帮忙看看，哪个版本比较好