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[托福] 回馈+为申请攒人品:T104的经验和感受(偏重写作)

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 楼主| Ror 2014-1-14 11:40:08 | 只看该作者
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y111d 发表于 2014-1-12 00:30
谢谢你给转的原来的文章!我看过之后对这种交锋式的写作方式深感赞同,你还能不能多发点类似模式文章借我看 ...

Should adults make important decisions for their older teenage children
-baidu 1point3acres
写作思路:
1、整体采用“交锋式写作法”,即通过驳斥反面观点建立正面观点。
2、A段: 描述当今(中国)社会的现象:虽然不是全部,但有很多成年人为孩子做决定。并描述反面观点。
3、B段: 描述反面观点的理由。
4、C段: 对B段的理由逐一批驳。. Χ
5、D段:描述正面观点,并解释说明。
6、E段:总结陈辞。.google  и

In today's society of China, many parents tend to make important decisions for their teenage children, behind which it is the Chinese tradition "father guides son".  Though I personally believe that adults should not make important decisions on behalf of their children, there are still a lot of people that disagree with me.

    These people could find many reasons to support their objection, and the one that says the children cannot make correct decisions due to lack of life experience is referred to the most.  They believe that no correct decisions can be made without sufficient life experiences, and once wrong decisions are made, it always costs the children's time and energy to correct them. The parents don't want such costs because they hope their children could go directly to the success without any "meanders".

    Such behaviors of these parents, however, could not be wrong anymore.  The children will grow up and finally have to stand on their own feet, because in most cases their parents would pass away earlier than they do.  If the children do not learn to make decisions by themselves when they are young, how could they be supposed to do so wisely when they have no way to rely on their parents someday?

    I believe the teenage period is the best time for children to learn decision-making.  This is reasoned as follows.  First, a person's success is judged by his/her ending, not starting, thus it should be acceptable that the person falls behind the others at the early stage of life because he/she still has a lot of time to catch up.  Second, the earlier the stage of life the person is in, the less it costs to make corrections, thus nobody should worry too much about choosing a wrong choice when a person is young.  Finally, wrong decisions can teach the children a good lesson so the next time they will consider more deeply and thoroughly before making up their minds. (这里想有一个简短一些的总结句,但不知道怎么写比较好。)

    The parents must help train their children's skill of making decisions, as a way of preparing them to face the future challenges independently.  When their children are struggling for a decision, the parents could provide suggestions, help collect information, or simply let go by themselves, but should never tell them what to do directly.
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 楼主| Ror 2014-1-14 11:43:46 | 只看该作者
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y111d 发表于 2014-1-12 00:30
谢谢你给转的原来的文章!我看过之后对这种交锋式的写作方式深感赞同,你还能不能多发点类似模式文章借我看 ...

暂时就这些了。我另外还有2、3篇习作,不过不是这种“交锋式”的,基本属于一边倒或者两边讨好类型的,所以没有贴出来。我当初并没有练习很多篇,主要是因为工作中经常用英文写邮件,所以写作功底在工作中多少慢慢夯实了。不过我也自认为我的文字水平还需要再提高一个台阶。而下面这个台阶就不好往上迈了,需要更大量的阅读和写作的积累。最后祝考好!
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y111d 2014-1-14 11:46:43 | 只看该作者
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感谢!这么多篇我要好好研读了!
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 楼主| Ror 2014-1-14 11:52:10 | 只看该作者
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y111d 发表于 2014-1-14 11:46 . ----
感谢!这么多篇我要好好研读了!

有错误和建议欢迎指出。共同学习和进步~
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y111d 2014-1-29 10:05:34 | 只看该作者
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第四次考T,今天出分了91,作文25,特地来感谢下!哥们你这几篇作文帮了我大忙!
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changsidi 2014-2-15 23:55:48 | 只看该作者
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楼主你的综合写作里面没有加文章里面的例子木?
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