综合写作求改、求狠批。。越狠越好。。

综合写作总感觉挤不出牙膏。。很多表达不知道怎么写才地道。。求大家狠批。。。感谢感谢。。

Nowadays, there exists a kind of mosquitos spreading a certain disease. Scientists created a new species of  modified genetic mosquitos to intercourse with those mosquitos, leading to the  defects of their descendants in order to reduce the population of mosquitos that diffuses the disease which is able to help precluding the disease. However, a amount of people don't consider the idea proposed in the passage a good one.

First of all, the listening material points out that the decrease of this species of mosquitos may lead to the increase of other species of mosquitos that carries the same or even more threatening virus and thus things will go contrary to our wishes.

In addition, people is afraid that the modified genetic mosquitos is likely to bite people and inject people with some artificial genes which can do no good to our health. Before carrying out this plan, scientists is required to make sure that collateral damage is going to happen.

Last but not least, the lecturer indicates that it’s possible that modified genetic mosquitos can cause environmental issues. As a result, they may effect other species and bring labile factors to the fragile ecosystem. The example of modified genetic vegetable can well illustrate this point. Scientists brought about a kind of modified genetic vegetable to get over its drawbacks while keep its merits. But this movement came to an end because of the consequence of the half decrease of butterflies around this kind of vegetable.As above mentioned, the reading and the listening contents are opposing.

模板性太强了，综合是要模板，但最好自己改个比较灵活的自己的模板套作
各分点内容少了点
不过写成这样内容没错的话也该有25吧

去TPO小站吧，我当年在那上面搞得，效果不错，独立写作最高拿到29分。。。

你这不是独立写作吧？这种考阅读的一方面靠你表述自己看法的能力，另一方面也考你的提炼概括信息能力。你这没原文，网友没办法帮你评估写作质量的。而且写作这东西提升速度也慢，很多学校卡的也不是写作，感觉没必要死磕。

我不是笨蛋 发表于 2015-10-16 20:00
模板性太强了，综合是要模板，但最好自己改个比较灵活的自己的模板套作
各分点内容少了点
不过写成这样内 ...

我感觉所有综合写作都是第一段说阅读和听力互相反对的。然后就是first、second、last。这不是格式么？。。其他我没感觉有多少模版啊。。。

sirpanzer 发表于 2015-10-16 21:58
去TPO小站吧，我当年在那上面搞得，效果不错，独立写作最高拿到29分。。。

请问小站上批得分数跟最后的考出来的成绩差别怎么样?谢谢

shijia8888 发表于 2015-10-24 06:56
请问小站上批得分数跟最后的考出来的成绩差别怎么样?谢谢

完全一样。。。