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[申请文书] Resume & CV 修改考古神贴

   
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 楼主| duanmupeiyi 2010-9-18 01:10:17 | 只看该作者
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这是一个申请11fall phd的cv,请各位多提意见。谢谢。申请结束,cv的成稿会在地里为后面申请者无条件分享。-baidu 1point3acres

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心亦D 发表于 2010-9-17 07:56


There are few members having score over 10,000.
If you want other senior members to look at your CV, please lower the restriction.
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本帖最后由 ljcljc 于 2010-9-18 09:26 编辑 . 1point3acres
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麻烦大家帮我看看我的简历,多谢了!!
我是申请11fall,CS的master.1point3acres
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193# duanmupeiyi

已经照端木的要求把分数限制调下来了。版主的意见很对,疏忽了。
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 楼主| duanmupeiyi 2010-9-18 09:55:25 | 只看该作者
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190# mxc8680
好奇怪,为什么你设置了阅读权限150,我还是可以下载,尽管我的权限只有100

还是把权限降低吧,注册就有10权限,中级会员是50,地里的中级会员本身就不多

Use the same font. Your name is in Serif font.

Graduate Date: June, 2011
is usually written as "Expected" or "Anticipated" June 2011

Put some space between sections. Your RESEARCH AREA section is too crowded.

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Research Experience:
No period at the end of statements..1point3acres
They should be in reverse chronological order.
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Suspended this project unfortunately because the budget oversteps our research funding.

I don't think it's fit into your CV.
Compared the two solutions for the vibration source of this system and finally chosen the hydraulic actuator instead of the linear electric motor because of its prizes and the actuating force it can provide

Wordy. Make your description concise.

Enlightened by the nonlinearity and time delay problem faced in the suspension system project.

This kind of sentence is OK in your PS, but not CV.
. Waral dи,
Rate limitation and time delay will be considered in the next step.

I don't think future plan should be put in CV.

In my opinion, it's better to reconsider the descriptions for your research experience. CV is for academic usage. Everything should be formal and professional. You may get some inspiration by looking at CVs of other researchers in your field.. check 1point3acres for more.
. Waral dи,
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The title of the PROJECT section should be on the same page as its content.
I don't think you need to enumerate your project or research experience.
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The word "designed" was used seven times. Try to rephrase.. Waral dи,

Same as above, no period at the end.

Programmed with MATLAB for simulation.
. 1point 3 acres
This one appeared three times. . Waral dи,

Again, I think it's better to consider rephrase the descriptions. Show the significance of your projects.

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"Teaching Experience", instead of "Teach"
Both the format and wording is pretty uncommon. Well, it looks weird to me.

WORKING instead of WORK. check 1point3acres for more.
Same comments as above

Your usage of bold face is also uncommon. Also, it is not please to eyes.
What is E-club?

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HONORS:
The titles of honors are usually in italic or boldface, rather than double quotation marks. I'm sure if there is any rule about it. But the samples I have seen don't use " ".

SKILLS:
there should be a comma after "SQL"
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zach 2010-9-18 09:58:57 | 只看该作者
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谢谢各位大哥大姐啦~
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mxc8680 发表于 2010-9-17 03:58
1. 对于大多数非牛小本申请,CV和resume没太大区别,写一份就行,愿意叫啥就叫啥
2. 非牛人不要写太多充字数,感觉你的CV描述的就有点太罗嗦了
3. 要看有没有值得写的经历了(和ps配合着写。我能想到的可能是国际会议的volunteer?)。校庆志愿者就算了……
4. no
5. 随意. 1point3acres
6. 非牛人加了反倒限制自己的可能性啊。
7. GPA算得是你成绩单上所有百分制课程的加权平均. check 1point3acres for more.
8. no

. 1point 3 acres
150我可以看耶……
自打我说了句 没隐藏隐私的同学可以设个权限以免泄露隐私,后来的同学就都懒的去掉自己的名字了啊。端木这个贴是为了帮助更多的人写好CV,我强烈建议后来的同学都隐去隐私内容然后公开放出来,端木帮你的忙,你也要帮端木的忙,对不对?别偷懒哈~~~

1. 为啥只有major GPA加粗?要么overall也加粗……要么都别……

2. again,描述太罗嗦了。举几个例子,quarter car里的
a. 第一条直接说verify xx,别to make sure啥啥的,多罗嗦.
b. power system of the wheel? 这说法好诡异……精简点可以说calculated the torque and speed啥啥的就行了,这个是controller吧?power system是电力系统……?. 1point3acres.com
c. compared直接杀掉,就说use the hydraulic actuator,然后说你用的什么skill,怎么use的就行了。不用because of,教授比你懂
d. 别in order to,直接analyzed the system, designed xxx parameter
e. studied xxx就别说了,这不叫research
f. 貌似第一次改给你说过了啊,“Suspended this project unfortunately because the budget oversteps our research funding.”这个太诡异了……
后面的同理。感觉你这个密密麻麻的两页全是字,突出不了重点,而且水分比较大

3.project可以和research合并到一个section,不用分这么清。
“Top 5% of all the projects.”让人不知所云。again, project这个section里面的4条也挤挤水分,捡跟你专业技能有关的说,用语要简洁。“Considered the large inertia and the length of robot arm and then came up with the idea of the lead-lag compensation all by myself.”就太罗嗦了
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4. 感觉你内个不能叫teach experience,也就是个extracurricular activity……why 加粗 yale和Harvard?…………. 1point3acres

Good luck~
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这是一个申请11fall phd的cv,请各位多提意见。谢谢。申请结束,cv的成稿会在地里为后面申请者无条件分享。

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心亦D 发表于 2010-9-17 10:56
隐去了隐私其实可以直接公开的哈~~
欢迎分享成稿,记得履行承诺哦~

抛砖引玉:
1. Engineering Mechanics Department这说法好奇怪……
2. professional experience里面第一条第二点,firstly found。东大那条,Finite Element Method首字母不用大写,后面加个括号(FEM)大写,然后最后的skills里就可以直接用FEM了。
btw. 偶也做有限元,我们这里一般用FEA而不是FEM……不知道是不是专业的区别,呵呵。. 1point 3acres
3. 貌似标准化考试的翻译是standardized test……建议加点,好看点。

不愧是硕士申请,写的research experience那块感觉很简洁有力,同学们可以学习下~比如190楼的学弟~
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 楼主| duanmupeiyi 2010-9-18 10:31:36 | 只看该作者
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这是一个申请11fall phd的cv,请各位多提意见。谢谢。申请结束,cv的成稿会在地里为后面申请者无条件分享。
. From 1point 3acres bbs
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心亦D 发表于 2010-9-17 07:56


赞LaTeX ^^
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right margin is way too small
the header is not necessary

Education:
No need for bullet points
.1point3acresM.S. and B.S. in ABC, no department at the end. The degrees are in a certain field, rather than a department.
"Rank" 2/30 since it may not be obvious for people who are not familiar w/ Chinese universities

Is scholarship countable?
A-Level Scholarships and Outstanding student for two Years

"year" y in lower case

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Professional Experience:. 1point 3 acres
The round bullet points are in weird positions.
it's weird to call your project teammate "Co-worker." Also why do you want put Dr.XYZ's name in your CV when he/she is not your advisor? Is he/she very famous in your field?
I think "collaborator" is better.

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Publication:
There should be some punctuation between "YZ. Xia" and the title..google  и

The test scores are too far apart. Make them aligned or choose other formatting.
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Office 2K is too informal.
LaTeX is not an application.
Ubuntu and Windows are operating systems.
Also, Linux is enough. You don't have to specify Ubuntu.
. 1point3acres.com

Best wishes~
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 楼主| duanmupeiyi 2010-9-18 10:41:14 | 只看该作者
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本帖最后由 duanmupeiyi 于 2010-9-17 18:44 编辑
麻烦大家帮我看看我的简历,多谢了!!
我是申请11fall,CS的master
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ljcljc 发表于 2010-9-17 17:21



ljcljc 也是地里元老了~ 祝你申请顺利哈 ^^

NO picture, please....

国内写简历的规矩是不是和美国这边完全不同?我看我在复旦的朋友的中文简历,也是把校徽加在里面。不过这边还真是不加校徽的。。。

Do the left margin and right margin have the same length? The right margin seems too narrow.

No objective if you're applying for grad school instead of jobs

因为大家都是从左向右读的,最好还是把重要信息放在左边,次要信息,如地点时间等放在右边
虽然这并不是 死规定,但是端木觉得很有道理,你做过什么比具体时间重要的多

还没有毕业,不要写 B.S. in ABC
要么就是学校加上参加时间. 1point3acres
要么就是 学位加上预计时间

Work & Research Experiences
I think just "Experience" is enough.
Is experience countable?

"Projects" as the title is enough
Honors:
No high school honor in CV
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 楼主| duanmupeiyi 2010-9-18 10:54:19 | 只看该作者
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1. 对于大多数非牛小本申请,CV和resume没太大区别,写一份就行,愿意叫啥就叫啥
2. 非牛人不要写太多充字数,感觉你的CV描述的就有点太罗嗦了
3. 要看有没有值得写的经历了(和ps配合着写。我能想到的可能是国际会 ...
zach 发表于 2010-9-17 17:58

莫非因为咱们是版主?

多谢Zach的支持
对了,我打算在首楼里面添加一些FAQ和参与活动注意事项,你有什么意见和建议吗?
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心亦D 2010-9-18 10:56:08 | 只看该作者
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198# zach

谢谢zach的意见。我一条条的请教。. 1point 3acres


1.Engineering Mechanics Department, 是不是应该写成Department of Engineering Mechancis?. 1point 3 acres
2.FEM和FEA的区别:FEM--finite element method ,这个是一个方法,比如有人是专门研究一种特殊网格的,或者在非线性有限元中怎么更快收敛,更好稳定性的。FEA--finite element analysis,就是基于有限元的分析。比如:我给一个压力容器通过有限元进行强度校核。所以我觉得第一个东大那一条应该是FEM,后面商业软件那个是FEA。
3. 标准化考试那个是上次有人给说了,是我忘改了。后面的“建议加点,好看点”,我没看懂什么意思?请Zach说详细点。我只考过这两个标准化考试啊。

btw, cv里免不了有不妥帖的地方。地里还是有很多新人,不像几位版主和高级会员对待cv,有很高的判断能力,基于以上考虑,还是先请几位版主和热心的高级会员过目,免得误导大家。cv成熟了,我自然会在地里分享,是大家讨论指点结果,最后是一定要和大家分享的。

thx,again!
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