奇怪的套词，诸位帮我看看我说的话对不？？

Dear Prof. Kris Hauser

How are you? My name is Zhengxu Hou and I am going to apply for 2018 fall graduate program at Duke University. . Sincerely, I wish I could be a member of your group.

I am very interested in your current project: Tele-Robotic Intelligent Nursing Assistant (TRINA). In the project, I think I can help to solve the swaying of the manipulator robotic arm. In essence, swaying is a result of the operator is constantly adjusting due to the robot's motion is not up to expectations. This is a very serious problem, especially in basic task like preparing food or beverage to people, since food and liquid may fall out of.

This phenomenon is very similar to my project: Two-wheel Self-Balancing Vehicle Based on ARM. At that time, because the torque of Stepper motor was very large, the vehicle has to automatically adjust the speed of the wheel in a very short period of time, so there was also a sway phenomenon. At that time, I used PID adjustment and MATLAB simulation to adjust the parameters, and finally the car could stand. In your project, I think the motor torque in the mechanical arm（rethink robotics baxter） is also big, and I'd like to accept this challenge.

That being said, the application of this project in clinical medical treatment is promising. So, do you think my plan is feasible? I would appreciate if you could review my C.V. and let me know what the possibilities might be.

Best Regards
Zhengxu, Hou
University of Science & Technology of Heilongjiang, China


诸位学长学姐学弟学妹们，帮我看看我这个套词是不是哪里说的不妥？我已经发了五个教授，可是都没有回复我，都是学术套啊，我认真的读了人家的论文？

系里已经开始审材料了吧

首先陶瓷信不回很正常，教授每天收到的各种邮件实在是太多了。
然后就LZ发的这个邮件来说，提出的问题和解决方案都比较trivial……
……而且语言水平也不是很好，读起来有点尴尬有点累。

描述自己的项目可以多加些细节吧~   
本来二轮自平衡车就是很普通的小项目，好像每年飞思卡尔都有？？？
“利用PID调节”也是很general的解决方案，“matlab仿真”这句说了等于没说啊，，既然是学术套，就要说出unique的地方~
（以前面试的时候也被这样 怼 过

太长了！教授不会理你的且现在是申请旺季！修改简短些且邮件主题要鲜明明了些才行

大都会做题家 发表于 2018-2-7 20:46
首先陶瓷信不回很正常，教授每天收到的各种邮件实在是太多了。
然后就LZ发的这个邮件来说，提出的问题和解 ...

诶 这个语言呐，虽然托福作文高，但是写出来了都是不怎么地道的话

nagato 发表于 2018-2-7 21:02
描述自己的项目可以多加些细节吧~   
本来二轮自平衡车就是很普通的小项目，好像每年飞思卡尔都有？？？
...

原来如此，谢谢哦，我的科研经历实在是太弱了，说不出来多么高深的话，尴尬

hqy_023 发表于 2018-2-7 21:50
太长了！教授不会理你的且现在是申请旺季！修改简短些且邮件主题要鲜明明了些才行

不长不长，放在邮件的界面没几行，我这个已经是想办法缩短了的，，，