又写了一篇jj作文，还是很没底

想请大家帮忙看看，主要是lz感觉逻辑不行。简单粗暴写不太出来。不一定要修改，如果能提一些思路会非常感谢。

Agree or disagree, in order to succeed, you should be more like others than be different from everyone else.

  
With the booming development of the modern society, there are more and more fierce competitions among people. Everyone is pursuing success. Therefore, there is a heated debate that in order to succeed one should be more like others than be different from everyone else. As everyone aims to be successful, different people have different opinion towards this issue. Depending on personal experience, personality type and emotional concerns, I think that one should be different from everyone else if he wants to succeed. My conspicuous opinions will be substantiated based on the following reasons.

To begin with, it is known to all that nowadays modern technology and science is developing more and more quickly. Therefore, everyone spares no effort to enrich his knowledge and broad his horizon in order to be more competitive in the fierce competition among other people. We cannot deny the fact that if everyone is like others instead of being different from everyone else, no one will be successful because there are no perfect and wonderful characteristics in the society. For example, when I was young, I wanted to be successful in a dancing competition. I asked the winner of the last year competition and practiced the same type of dance for my competition. Finally I lost the game because the teachers said in spite of my excellent dancing skill, my dance lacked creativity. In the next year competition, I just chose the type of dance that I loved most and I won the champion without doubt.

In the second place, as it is common sense that in order to succeed, one should has the personality of creativity and persistence. Without creativity, one will never succeed because all the behaviors he acts cannot raise the concern of other people. There is no deny that there are abundant examples of the successful people who are different from everyone else. For example, Bill Gates is one of the most famous business man in the world. He was so different from everyone else instead of being like others since he was in university. Because of his creativity, he dropped university to stand his own company, which seemed strange among his classmates and professors. However, he finally won the success because of his innovation and courage to be different from others.

Last but not least, admittedly, as for some people, it is too extreme to claim that one will only be successful if he is different from everyone else. We should admit the fact that we can draw successful and meaningful experience from the successful people in order to plan the future. There is always something we can learn from the successful people in order to succeed, such as the charming personality, persistence, sense of responsibility and so on. What is more, in the modern society, it is possible that other people will consider one a monster if he is so different from everyone else.

In light of all the aspects discussed above and taking all the factors into consideration, we may safely draw the conclusion that being different from everyone else will be more likely for someone to be successful. Because great importance is attached to the creativity and courage of being different from everyone else in order to succeed.

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……这个和LZ的题目应该是一样的吧……