查看: 825|回复: 0
收起左侧

[T作文-求改] 独立作文求改 100924NA

|只看干货
本楼: 👍   0% (0)
 
 
0% (0)   👎
全局: 👍   100% (6)
 
 
0% (0)    👎

注册一亩三分地论坛,查看更多干货!

您需要 登录 才可以下载或查看附件。没有帐号?注册账号

x
题目:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Colleges or Universities should offer more courses to prepare students for the future before they start working.100924NA

驳论提纲:1. 这样做带来的坏处:基础知识的牢固性,企业需要基础知识非常牢固的学生
2. 这样做带来的坏处:流失一些理论性人才
3. 不这样做的话,学生可以自己有针对性的自己准备
收尾:承认学校提供这样的课程方便学生就业准备,让学生能更快融入社会工作,但...

修改侧重点:词汇运用,当然其他方面有问题也请大声指出,谢谢!


正文:

Thereis a growing awareness of both the positive and negative influences that collegesor universities offering more courses on future working brings to students. Inmy opinion, I argue that there should not be more courses provided for them to getprepared for the future before entering the workplace.

Morecourses on career development means that the focus of the majority studentsturns from the basic knowledge of one’s major to the future job. If more coursesin terms of career were offered, students would pay less attention to further acquirementof fundamental knowledge, which is of great significance to students. Forexample, if massive lectures relating to Microsoft Software EngineeringCertification are available, students might pick them as an easier access to anoccupation in Microsoft Company after graduation. In such case, more time mightbe occupied by these courses whereas less on theoretical subjects. Naturally,this would lead to negative influences on consolidating the foundation of majorknowledge. In fact, what companies need are not only practical skills, but alsothe accumulation of one's professional knowledge, which is essential for thefuture development of each individual.

Besides,a series of career-related courses emphasize on enhancing students’ practicalskills. As a result, numerous students who have the talent in doing theoreticalresearch have been lost. Considerable though the advantages that moreproficient practical skills would result in more opportunities in finding a betterjob are, they might not contribute as much as those elites who have grasped thecore and seminal ideas do. It is those excellent students who have vital theoreticalbasis that promote the development of the whole society. For instance, Apple Companyand its CEO Steve Jobs might not obtain such notable achievements without thesevital and innovative theories of the interaction between human beings andcellphones.

Sincethere are accessible ways of collecting different kinds of informationregarding jobs, is it still necessary to explicitly provide more courses onfuture working? Undoubtedly, students can totally prepare themselves for futurejobs with the capability of collecting career information. Choices should be madeby students themselves since they are supposed to be ready for entering thesociety.

In conclusion, thoughadmitted by the public that school presents more courses on career developmentwould be of much convenience to students, and would facilitate their transitionfrom full-time students to full-time employees, it might be better for them to havethe freedom of making choices. Therefore, from my personal point of view, thereis no need for colleges or universities to offer more courses on careerdevelopment because a more liberal environment would be more essential tostudents.

评分

参与人数 1大米 +20 收起 理由
vincent11 + 20

查看全部评分


上一篇:独立作文求改 110619CN=100710NA
下一篇:一战92,二战102,零碎时间备考托福个人心得
您需要登录后才可以回帖 登录 | 注册账号
隐私提醒:
  • ☑ 禁止发布广告,拉群,贴个人联系方式:找人请去🔗同学同事飞友,拉群请去🔗拉群结伴,广告请去🔗跳蚤市场,和 🔗租房广告|找室友
  • ☑ 论坛内容在发帖 30 分钟内可以编辑,过后则不能删帖。为防止被骚扰甚至人肉,不要公开留微信等联系方式,如有需求请以论坛私信方式发送。
  • ☑ 干货版块可免费使用 🔗超级匿名:面经(美国面经、中国面经、数科面经、PM面经),抖包袱(美国、中国)和录取汇报、定位选校版
  • ☑ 查阅全站 🔗各种匿名方法

本版积分规则

>
快速回复 返回顶部 返回列表