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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should assign homework for students every day.
Admittedly, students deepen their understanding of the content they learned by doing homework, but too much homework certainly causes stress on students lowering the efficiency of study. Generally, students who cannot finish their assignment would get punished. If the assignment is too much to finish, students could be stressful and even copy others’ homework just for avoiding punishment. Therefore, nobody truly cares about what they learn from the assignment. Moreover, students would spend less time on their hobbies. Excessive homework occupies nearly all of their free time. Eventually, they might become nothing but bookworms.


Students are able to participate in activities that are beneficial for their mental and physical development, if teachers do not assign homework for them every day. Playing sports with friends, painting pictures, playing instruments would cultivate students’ healthy personalities, which are essential for them in the future. A recent study shows that, students who participate in team sports tend to have less problem getting along with others, and they are more likely to obtain a higher position in the job market compared to those who do not. Take my uncle for an example, he played for the basketball team when he was in high school. He told me that he learned from his coach and teammates about how to succeed through hard work, how to communicate with others, and how to be a tough man. All of these helped him make a different in his career. He really appreciated this experience.


In addition, without being bothered by excessive assignment, students could do research on the subjects they are interested in. Most homework serves as a means to lay a solid foundation of certain subjects and is limited in the topic, which could not satisfy students’ desire to explore further. Doing their own research would give students a clear vision of ares they might choose as a career in the future, thus they are able to plan ahead, not just waiting for others to point the way out.

Again, I do not suggest that teachers should not assign homework for students. Homework is essential for laying the foundation of the discipline, but too much assignment means a lower study efficiency, and students should be allowed to spend their time on activities or researches they are interested in. Therefore, teachers should not assign homework for students every day.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should assign homework for students every day.
Admittedly, students deepen their understanding of the content they learned by doing homework, but too much homework certainly causes stress on students lowering the efficiency of study. Generally, students who cannot finish their assignments would get punished. If the assignment is too much to finish, (Chinglish, 改:the assignment is overwhelmed) students could be stressful and even copy others’ homework just for avoiding punishment. Therefore, nobody (好像有点引起误会,改成no students) truly cares about what they learn from the assignment. Moreover, students would spend less time on their hobbies. Excessive homework occupies nearly all of their free time. Eventually, they might become (turn into)nothing but bookworms.


Students are able to participate in activities that are beneficial for their mental and physical development, if teachers do not assign homework for them every day. Playing sports with friends, painting pictures(删掉), playing musical instruments would cultivate students’ healthy personalities, which are essential for them in the future. A recent study shows that, students who participate in team sports tend to have less problem getting along with others (to be more social/ sociable ), and they are more likely to obtain a higher position in the job market compared to those who do not. Take my uncle for an example, he played for the basketball team when he was in high school.(back in his high school time) He told me that he learned from his coach and teammates about how to succeed through hard work (diligence), how to effectively communicate with others, and how to be a tough man both physically and mentally. All of these helped him make a different in his career(这句说得不够detailed,怎么个difference法?). He really appreciated this experience. 这个例子很好,不过举完以后很可惜没有回到论点上来,应该再补这么一句话——“我的uncle曾经对我说幸好他的high school time是在basketball的汗水中挥霍青春度过的,而不是埋在了题海里,不然他不会今天的career accomplishment”


In addition, without being bothered by excessive assignments, students could do research on the subjects they are interested in.这个论点非常有新意,加分! Most homework serves as a means to lay a solid foundation of certain subjects and is limited in within the topic, which could not satisfy students’ desire to explore further. Doing their own research would give students a clear vision of ares they might choose as a career in the future, thus they are able to plan ahead, not just waiting for others to point the way out.这一段还可以再detailed一点,比如举个例子:我们班有个同学很想去研究一般可测集上的函数积分是怎么处理的,结果我们的数分老师布置了太多区间上的初等calculus的习题,导致他没时间去研究,错失了拓展知识面的机会

Again, I do not suggest that teachers should not assign homework for students. Homework is essential for laying the foundation of the discipline, but too much assignment means a lower study efficiency, and students should be allowed to spend their time on activities or researches they are interested in. Therefore, teachers should not assign homework for students every day.

整篇文章还是不错的,主要是例子不够详细,以及语言上有一点点问题。另外,由于例子展开稍逊充分,篇幅显得略短。
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perlin 发表于 2013-10-10 17:48
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should assign homework for students  ...

超级感谢版主大人的评论啊!仔细看了,都很切中要害,我自己写作的时候也经常不知道怎么充分展开例子,而且经常每一段说完例子后都不知道要再讲什么,和接下来那一段的过渡很生硬。。不过托福分数昨天出来了发现不用再考了,还是十分感谢!
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小柯西 发表于 2013-10-10 20:00
超级感谢版主大人的评论啊!仔细看了,都很切中要害,我自己写作的时候也经常不知道怎么充分展开例子,而 ...

恭喜啊!原来是考前求批改的,抱歉晚了几天最近一直忙。BTW,求加米:)
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perlin 发表于 2013-10-10 20:19
恭喜啊!原来是考前求批改的,抱歉晚了几天最近一直忙。BTW,求加米:)

哈哈哈,其实是在等成绩的时候求批改,当时以为要考第二次
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