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题目:Professors should prohibit the use of devices that connect to the internet in class.


The past few years have witnessed the rapid development of technology, especially in the field of electronic devices. As a result, it's quite common for students to be equipped with devices that can connect to the Internet, such as laptops, mobile phones and computers. However, the use of devices connected to the Internet in class can cause negative effects like undermining academic performance and interrupting professors. Thus, personally speaking, prohibiting the use of devices that can connect to the Internet in class makes sense.

First of all, unrestricted use of devices connected to the Internet in class may decrease students' academic performance. To illustrate, with the development of technology, numerous interesting and intriguing applications come out. Students can easily download electronic games on those devices and usually cannot resist the temptation of games. As a result, they are likely to become fully indulged in games, with their attention distracted away from the class, not absorbing any knowledge from the professors. For example, when I was in a math class in middle school, the professor asked the boy sitting behind me a problem, and he couldn't answer it although the problem was quite easy as long as you paid attention to the teacher. This was because he wasn't listening to the professor at all and he was too concentrated on the game he was playing on his phones.

Additionally, the use of devices that can connect to the Internect in class interrupts the professors' teaching as well. A well-trained professor always care for his students, including whether they follow his pace of teaching and providing immediate feedbacks for students. In order to ensure that all the students have a comprehensive understanding of what he has taught, professors will warn students whose attention are not paid to the class from time to time. Under such circumstance, the pace of teaching is disturbed and thus the professor can't finish his original schedule. Also, frequent notifications from electronic devices can also be distracting and will upset the professor.

Admittedly, with the unrestricted access to electronic devices in class, students can acquire more information online immediately, from browsing the relevant websites to communicating ideas and thoughts with people on social platforms. However, in real life, students tend to play games or chat with others over irrelevant topics if they are allowed to use electronic devices in class.

In conclusion, considering the reasons stated above, it's more beneficial for students and professors respectively to have prohibited use of devices connected to the Internet in class.








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写作独立的话推荐慎小嶷的《十天搞定新托福ESSAYS》,里面说的都非常实用。你可以结合托福OG给出的标准来看,我感觉一般需要提升的都是development以及表达的丰富程度,这本书都给了很详细的解释。这里有第一版网盘的链接链接:https://pan.baidu.com/s/1k3rUbCGusW9KVYZVruF5ZQ 提取码:jttn 不过已经出了第二版,不贵就四五十的样子,我觉得很值。这本书我考前一周才看,受益良多,几年前考是25,这次28。做不到地里大神的满分但是自己也有一些体会。
1 关于什么是“好”文章:一定一定要自己研究一下OG,起码仔细对比一下3分4分5分的文章啥区别,再和自己的对照就知道自己怎么努力了。其实托福独立写作有点新时代八股文的意思,不需要很华丽的语言,只要按照套路告诉考官有逻辑的表达就行。我的体会是丰富的句式+合乎逻辑的缜密的观点+有支持力的例证+及格的结构

2 关于观点枯竭:其实我觉得托福独口语和写作有相通之处,就是经常讨论一些我们实际生活中觉得好无聊的问题(起码我这么觉得)。如果想观点有困难,可以对着题库或者机经TPO啥的自己brain storm 自己想不出来可以google 看看别人是什么观点 什么立场 什么思路。其实想一定的数量的题目就能大概掌握套路。关键是得练。不过慎小嶷的书也有提到展开思路的方法,可以学一学。
分类法
老房子分成需要拆的和不需要拆的
高中生分成 文科生 以及理科生
替代法
出现最 用替代法
裸奔法
Team and trust
Mind and skill
Socialization and competition
Tenacity and pressure
Right and responsibility
Environment and health
Employment and efficiency
Culture and tradition
Money and enjoyment

3 有关字数,肯定不是越多越好,当然需要在保证质量的情况下多写一些,因为只有及格的长度保证了才充分展示自己的逻辑。
打字的话如果不是飞速,也是需要练习下,保证自己盲打知道键位就行哈。推荐typeclub我感觉连起来比金山打字通有意思。

如果写不到有人的六七百(我就手残 模考最多350,考场上400),我觉得首要的是保证你已经阐述的观点的论证逻辑,五段论可以换成四段论:一个观点用了举例论证对比论证肯定比没有解释句就生搬例子有说服力。

4 关于提升表达丰富度的问题:不是体现在生僻词,而是体现在丰富的句式(倒装、强调等)、地道的词块以及同义词的合适替换。这些这本书都能帮你
关于句型我大概从《十》记了几种,基本是我在练习和考场上有意识的去用
倒装
Not only will kids improve their cardiovascular and muscular strength, endurance, flexibility and hand-eye coordination, but they will also learn perseverance, goal-setting and coping skills to deal with success and failure.(有这种类似排比的句子不仅能增加表达的丰富度,还能让你的句子脱离口水话而且信息量丰富)
Only in this way can the problem of child obesity be effectively controlled.
Under no circumstances should teachers punish their students physically.
副词



强调句
It is     that/who   
虚拟语气
The recent crisis could not have occurred without the participation of the biggest players on Wall Street.
Had I lived in a small town, my life would have been confined to very few possibilities.

关于词块建议你掌握几个万金油 什么fabric of society,State-of -the-art,Break boundaries,Pass up opportunities 有时间书里的都背了熟练运用也行啊
同义词替换 这个要自己平时积累 推荐一个网站https://www.collinsdictionary.com/dictionary/english-thesaurus 平时练习后的修改多查查,很多词多次使用才能记住啊
5 关于低级错误:如果做TPO可以用网上erater(比如考满分的),如果做机经可以用grammarly批改低级语法错误,如果你自己不能有效地修改自己的文章可以去某宝等地买批改服务。!!!!一定要改如果说前面所有的努力都是加分,这一项就是避免扣分,只有平时改了才能知道自己容易犯什么语法错误(三单啊,冠词啊等)考场才能在高压状态检查出来。!一定要留几分钟检查回顾,避免失分(下面视频里的老采取了另一种检查的顺序)
可数名词注意冠词
动词不能直接做主语
被动语态
主语很长就一定要检查单复数
议论文一般不用过去式
Reason for
Solution to
代词距离名词比较远的时候一定注意单复数
run-on sentences

6 如果做不到自学,建议报个班,听说黎老师写作不错(只是看知乎等的评价)我在知乎看了一个答主贴的视频也觉得很有启发 链接放在这里了https://www.zhihu.com/zvideo/1379126928171966464 (这个老师用的方法就是先写开头、提纲和结尾,然后再逐层补充细节。这样既能保证结构的完整性,又能多读几遍自己的文章保证减少低级错误)我就采取了这种方式,再也不用担心写烂尾文了TAT来自手慢党的苦恼。

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 楼主| EmilyQ2001 2021-10-6 10:46:39 | 显示全部楼层
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加米是怎么操作的,有回复的话我试一下~
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EmilyQ2001 发表于 2021-10-05 19:46:39
加米是怎么操作的,有回复的话我试一下~
点楼层中的那个快速+1就是了,我刚刚考完,写作23,个人感觉你写的很好,比我写的好:D各种逻辑连接词用的很流畅,所以我也没有什么好点评。只是提醒下可以用grammarly帮忙批注小的语法错误,还是挺好用的,可以淘宝买账号,另外kmf上有erater,写完可以去那里打分。祝好运

补充内容 (2021-10-11 12:26 +08:00):
Grammarly有word插件,挺好用的

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感觉你段中的结构有点问题。建议是 topic sentence 加 解释句 加例子解释 还可以适当加一些让步或者第二个例子之类的,读起来觉得这一段非常的有逻辑,让人信服。这样一个段就写的很丰满,具体可以看我的一个回答,我就直接贴在下面啦。
以第一个topic为例:影响学生课堂表现 ——》(解释句就是把第一个句子用人话说出来)因为网络相关的东西有很多与课堂无关的内容,让学生容易分神,导致学生不能认真听讲也不能积极参与内容,所以会影响课堂表现 ——》 (与之对应的例子)我有个同学每天带手机上课,他上课总是忍不住去刷ins或者tiktok,老师提问他他也不能回答,考试也考得很差。。。。但是我另一个同学就坚决不带,他总能呼应老师,balabala。。。。。
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感觉楼主第二个点有点小问题 是不是改成手机在上课的时候会发出声音 打断课堂比较好?句式可以多用定从 非谓语。让步段有点短了

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EmilyQ2001 + 1 说的很对!但回复我的时候我已经考完了hh

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 楼主| EmilyQ2001 2021-10-27 00:03:56 | 显示全部楼层
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Paul.Zhang 发表于 2021-10-25 16:36
感觉楼主第二个点有点小问题 是不是改成手机在上课的时候会发出声音 打断课堂比较好? ...
说的很对!但回复我的时候我已经考完了hh
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