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本帖最后由 ScottShao 于 2013-8-19 09:16 编辑

Government should focus its budgets more on environmental protection than on economic development.

Two main concerns of people nowadays are environmental issues and economic growth, which involve respectively with people’s physical health and quality of their life. With the increasing concerns about both two aspects, governments are hesitating in which they should invest more funds. Some people claim that economic development deserves more budgets. From my perspective, however, more money should be put on the protection of environment than on the development of economy, for no delay allowed for environmental problems and promotion of economy environmental conservation will bring about.

To begin with, the economy of a country can be promoted at any time, while the conservation of environment cannot be delayed. In other words, once environment is polluted, people can hardly or have to pay giant cost to reverse the situation, for the complexity and diversity of environmental issues. For example, after the Industrial Revolution, the pollution in the Thames River became horrible. When British government realized that problem, it takes them tens of years and large amount of money to solve it. Just like my mom always tells me, " It's easy to make something dirty, really hard to make it clean again."

Furthermore, protecting the environment boosts the economic development to some extend. A place where air is filled with unpleasant scent, mountains are surrounded by polluted water can hardly attract numerous visitors, even it has many historical sites. However, when the environment has been improved, the situation is completely different. According to an article published in China Tourism News, about 80 percent of tourists would not take Shaoxing, where has been severely polluted by human activities, as their first choice in 2008, while about 60 percent of visitors tend to choose Shaoxing, where is generally considered as one of the most beautiful and peaceful towns for relaxation. The reason why people’s choice altered is that the local government invested a large amount of money into the improvement of local environment during the past five years. In this case, better environment is able to attract more visitors and thus can promote the growth of local economy.

However, it is undeniable that economic development is not only significant for every single person but for the whole country as well, since it concerns the foundation of individual life and state building. Yet, considering destructive consequences of environmental deterioration, the government should shift its focus to environmental issues.

As I said, while economic development is essential for both individuals and whole society, it pales in importance compared to environmental protection. We do need a "Heaven" with clean water and air, green trees and beautiful mountains. The "Hell" with money is always our last choice.

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本帖最后由 hdchina2010 于 2013-8-19 00:19 编辑

Government should focus its budgets more onenvironmental protection than on economic development.


Two main concerns of people nowadays areenvironmental issues and economic growth, which involve respectively withpeople’s physical health and quality of their life. With the increasingconcerns about both two aspects, governments are hesitating in which theyshould invest more funds. Some people claim that economic development deservesmore budgets. From my perspective, however, more money should be put on theprotection of environment than on the development of economy, for no delayallowed for environmental problems and promotion of economy environmentalconservation will bring about.

To begin with, the economy of a country canbe promoted at any time, while the conservation of environment cannot bedelayed. In other words, once environment is polluted, people can hardly orhave to pay giant cost to reverse the situation, for the complexity anddiversity of environmental issues. For example, after the IndustrialRevolution, the pollution in the Thames River became horrible. When Britishgovernment realized that problem, it takes them tens of years and large amountof money to recovery it. Just like my mom always tells me, “It’s easy to makesomething dirty, but really hard to make it clean again."

Furthermore, protecting the environmentboosts the economic development to some extent. A place where air is filledwith unpleasant scent, mountains are surrounded by polluted water can hardlyattract numerous visitors, even it has many historical sites. However, when theenvironment has been improved, the situation is completely different. Accordingto an article published in China Tourism News, about 80 percent of touristswould not take Shaoxing, which has been severely polluted by human activities,as their first choice in 2008, while about 60 percent of visitors tend tochoose Shaoxing, where is generally considered as one of the most beautiful andpeaceful towns for relaxation. The reason why people’s choice altered is thatthe local government invested a large amount of money into the improvement oflocal environment during the past five years. In this case, better environmentis able to attract more visitors and thus promote the growth of local economy.

However, it is undeniable that economicdevelopment is not only significant for every single person but for the wholecountry as well, since it concerns the foundation of individual life and statebuilding. Yet, considering destructive consequences of environmentaldeterioration, the government should shift its focus to environmental issues.

As I said, while economic development isessential for both individuals and whole society, it pales in importancecompared to environmental protection. We do need a "Heaven" withclean water and air, green trees and beautiful mountains. The "Hell"with money is always our last choice.

1、it takes them tens of years and large amount of money to recover it.
recover感觉更好些 感谢bmbdl纠正
2、Furthermore, protecting the environment boosts the economic development to some extent.
注意拼写
3、According to an article published in China Tourism News, about 80 percent of tourists would not take Shaoxing, which has been severely polluted by human activities……
4、In this case, better environment is able to attract more visitors and thus promote the growth of local economy.
后面一个can可以去掉
5、Furthermore, protecting the environment boosts the economic development to some extent. A place where air is filled with unpleasant scent, mountains are surrounded by polluted water can hardly attract numerous visitors, even it has many historical sites. However, when the environment has been improved, the situation is completely different.
中间部分的陈述可以稍作调整,因为不是每个地方都是凭借tourist spot来作为经济收入的
因此可以讲环境太差影响外来的资本投资等等……

以上修改若有出入,欢迎各位指正
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hdchina2010 发表于 2013-8-18 18:43
Government should focus its budgets more onenvironmental protection than on economic development.  T ...

又是hdchina~~~感谢 问一下:第三点错误在哪
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ScottShao 发表于 2013-8-18 19:02
又是hdchina~~~感谢 问一下:第三点错误在哪

是which,不是where
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hdchina2010 发表于 2013-8-18 18:43
Government should focus its budgets more onenvironmental protection than on economic development.

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我又来挑刺了。。

1、it takes them tens of years and large amount of money to recovery it.

recovery感觉更好些

recovery 是名词

4、In this case, better environment is able to attract more visitors and thus promote the growth of local economy.

后面一个can可以去掉

我觉得可以用 can 的。如果去掉 can,thus 后边应该用第三人称单数 promotes。

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bmbdl 发表于 2013-8-18 22:17
我又来挑刺了。。

1、it takes them tens of years and large amount of money to recovery i ...

感谢 第一个已更正为recover
第二点没问题吧 promote接在 be able to后面
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bmbdl 发表于 2013-8-18 22:17
我又来挑刺了。。

1、it takes them tens of years and large amount of money to recovery i ...

感谢挑刺选手~~~
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hdchina2010 发表于 2013-8-19 00:20
感谢 第一个已更正为recover
第二点没问题吧 promote接在 be able to后面

and之后应该是平行的 所以promote是在主语之后 就是和is able to是一个时态
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