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[T作文-已改] 独立写作——机经上的 新人求照~

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本帖最后由 q198800287 于 2013-9-1 20:05 编辑

agree or disagree ,the environmental issue is too complex to handled to handle by individual
As the development of the society, environment seems to be a much more serious problem than ever. Nowadays, everyone who facing this detrimental conditions should be responsible for that, dealing with environmental problems such as pollution. Some people may think , the individual’s power is so small and dispersed that they can’t handle this global serious problem ,However, I think it not so complex for the individuals to handle that, the individual can also be the important power to push this problem to be solved. I will demonstrate my thoughts into three aspects.

Firstly, we can change our lifestyle to adapt to the circumstance , such as reducing the using of water, or the electricity , going to school or company by bus instead of cars . As I know more and more people with social responsibility are going to take it in practice, who joining in environmental activities like the “Earth Hour”. All of above facts shows that we are able to handle the environment by changing the lifestyle.

Additionally, we will benefit the environment by choosing commodity in the market. As the science and technology develops, more and more energy-saving product have been invented ,such as the l energy-saving light ,electrical cars . if we tend to these kinds of products when buying what we want ,It also has good beneficial impacts on the environment.

Finally, as individuals ,we also should apply our rights to pressure the government to take some magnificent actions to keep the environment from worsening if necessary, for instance , last year, In Kunming, a city famous for appropriate climate, A PX project (building the factory whose material is very bad for the environment if revealed) was planned to taken in practice. Thousands of citizens protested against this project to the government to protect their homeland , finally, this project has been canceled because of the pressure from society.

All in all, from the above aspects , we know that, there is much more things we can do beyond our imagination. Environmental problems concerns everyone ,we should, and have adequate ability or power to handle that. There is no “complex” in protecting our homeland.

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As society develops, problems with the environment seems to be a much more serious concern than ever. Nowadays, in the face of these detrimental conditions, everyone is responsible for dealing with environmental problems such as pollution. Some people may think that powers of individuals are so small and dispersed they will not affect serious global problems. However, while I think the problems are too complex for single individuals to handle, every individual can be important driving forces to push the problem to be solved. I will outline my thoughts in three aspects.

Firstly, we can change our lifestyle to adapt to the current situation by actions such as reducing the usage of water and electricity and going to school or work by bus instead of cars. As I know an increasing number of people with social responsibility that are taking it into practice by the way of joining in environmental activities like the “Earth Hour”. All of above facts shows that we are capable of handling the environment by changing our lifestyles.

Additionally, we can benefit the environment by choosing the correct products to purchase in the marketplace. As the science and technology develops, more and more environmentally-friendly(后面同句中又用一次energy-saving) products have been invented such as the energy-saving lightbulbs and electrical cars. If we prefer these kinds of products when selecting what to buy, there will be a positive impacts on the environment.

Finally, as individuals, we also should evoke our rights to pressure the government to take significant steps to prevent the environment from worsening if necessary. For instance, last year, in Kunming, a city famous for its pleasant climate, a project which constructs a factory of materials damaging to the environment was planned to be taken into practice. Thousands of citizens protested against the plan and petitioned the government to protect their homeland. Ultimately, the project was canceled due to public pressure.

All in all, from the above points we know that, there is much more things we can do beyond what we may have imagined. Environmental problems concerns everyone. We should, and have the adequate ability and resources to solve them. There is nothing “complex” when protecting our homeland is concerned.

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感觉楼主每一点写的都很单薄,没有表达出复杂的观点来。用的词汇量也不是很大。楼主是不是应该再多背背单词以写出更
丰富的作品来?

注意句子当中其实很多地方不需要逗号,用多了反而使句子感到不通畅。
有多个点子时不能用逗号强组为一句,而应该分成多个句子来写。

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putout 发表于 2013-9-1 10:55
As society develops, problems with the environment seems to be a much more serious concern than ever ...

谢谢大神,这是我准备作文是练习时候写的第一篇,英语扔下久了 忘了 好多东西,有很多不好的地方,总之,谢谢指教!
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