ps 求改 语言学教育方向 西安大略 感谢了

　　My first teachers are my parents who have taught me the essential things of being an honest person and sent me to Hunan Normal University(HUNNU), one of “the 211 Project” universities in China. College of Foreign Studies under HUNNU is noted for its achievements in the study and teaching of English language and literature. Based on this and my zest in English, I chose to major in English Language and Literature three years ago.
　　My choice has turned out wise for my excellent academic performance and my increasing interest towards English and education. Here I’ve been studying hard, which is shown in my academic record. Not satisfied with classroom teachings, I spent much time studying on my own to expand my vision. I consulted professors when in doubt but never blindly followed their thoughts.
　　All the hard work in major courses has added to my progress, but the training in HUNNU English Public Speaking&Debate Team has taught me critical thinking. The team only admits members from prize winners in contests. Through constant practice and study, I finally got in. And owing to the team, I, who used to blush talking in public, now could stand on stage to freely express my thoughts, which made I realize the power of language. A word could change the world and I could help English learners to be more confident, open-minded and critical through language learning.
　　In 2012, I was asked to fly to America for an exchange program before our team’s final in FLTRP English Debate Competition. That was the most difficult decision for me. Going to America meant that I would miss the final and all the final exams in the term, and ruin my GPA. But this program was a very rare opportunity and now I can be no more certain of that decision.
　　Time in America has given me enough time to retrospect what I have learned in the past and what I want to do in the future. According to my interest, I started several theses, several of which later got published on noted academic journals and earned me an opportunity to be in a project about BP debate’s application in English education in Wuhan Institute of Technology. Apart from all that, a broad view of the world also intrigues my aspiration to continue my study abroad.
　　My professor recommended University of Western Ontario to me. After a detailed research, I found myself attracted by its well-known reputation, high calibre of program, and a supportive environment. Among all the programs, the Linguistics program is eye-catching for the interdisipline researches in the laboratory. Grounded in my B.A. study in English language and literature, I can combine linguistics and literature in researches. As a native Chinese speaker with multi-language studies, I know more features of different languages and the difficulties in SLA. Besides, I can think critically and see things from another perspective in study. Therefore, I strongly believe that this program and me are completely matched.
　　Studying at your program in Linguistics will arm me with profound knowledge in linguistic research and motivating language learners to gain more through language study. Under the instruction of your student tailored program, I will surely have my potential further tapped, move a step closer to my dream profession, and provide more help to SL learners at home and abroad.

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人懒，就看了最后一段。
说得比较泛，应该针对学校、项目特点再说一些什么，贵校XXX的特点很适合我云云。