【独立】more salary for university professor

To improve the quality of education, university should spend more money on salary for university professor.
提纲：
不同意，提高薪水作用不大。同时，学生的态度才是重要的一个方面。
1、大学薪水很少，老师并不依靠薪水来make a living，而是更多地靠自己研究项目赚钱。比方说老师一个月工资5,000刀，老师一个月从项目上能赚50,000刀，那么即使薪水翻翻对老师诱惑也不大。更何况薪水翻番的可能性也不大。所以这个方法没用。
2、教育的质量在于学生本身。一个学生想要好好学习，自然会在课堂上集中注意力，课下和老师交流。就算老师是一个不认真的老师，也不会拒绝一个学生的问题。
结论：这个方法不会work out，倒是注重学生内在学习动力的培养才是更重要的。

It is now quite common that the teachers of universities are not serious about their teaching. They do not teach earnestly or be concerned with the quality of students’ homework. In other words, it’s seemed that they do not care whether the students have truly learned anything at all. Solutions to this phenomenon have long been discussed among the academics, and possible treatments have been raised to make up for it. One of the proposals is that the university should spend more money on salary for professors. However, according to my perspectives, this method won’t work out at all. For the increase in salary is such a small incentive that won’t affect the attitude of professors, and the fact that the quality of education doesn’t solely depend on the attitude of teachers, but on the performance of students as well, which won’t display much difference whether the professors teach industriously or not.
Firstly, the professors don’t depend on their salary to cover a cozy life, especially for those have their own fields of research, which give them profitable income. For example, if a teacher’s income is $5,000 per month, however, what he can gain from his research career is $50,000 per month. As a matter of fact, the teacher won’t care about how much money he could make in teaching at all. Even the university doubled his salary, still, it were only a minor percent of his total income. Not to mention that the increase in salary won’t be that much in extend. So the salary incentive method will serve no effect on the attitude of teachers.
In addition, the inner incentives of students play the most important role in one’s pursuit of better education. When a student truly wants to learn something, he will study hard in class, being focused on each word of the teacher, and come to the teacher for further assistance if there is anything he doesn’t grasp very well. Even the teacher didn’t take teaching seriously, he wouldn’t refuse a young’s eager for knowledge. So the quality of education depends more on the attitude of students rather than it of the teacher.
In a word, spending more money on professors’ salary won’t be an effective method to lift the quality of education. For the incentive is not sufficient to arouse the interest of teachers, and even the quality of education doesn’t depend on teacher at all, as we can see, it depends more on the learners themselves. So instead of focusing on professors, trying to stimulate the interest of students could be a better way.
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一些词汇上的东西：
第一段起作用“work out”和小激励“small”有没有更好的表达
教师认真教书用industrious合适吗？如果不合适的话有没有更恰当的表达？
薪水的增幅我用的extend合适吗？求更好的表达。
“更不要说薪水的增幅不会有这么大”这句话要怎样说才不会chinglish？


希望得到语言上的指教。
第一次尝试举详细的例子，感觉好多chinglish的表达，望高手能给予帮助。
也希望得到全文结构方面的指正。感觉我就老师这块说的比例不算大，还有一半篇幅在谈学生的方面，这样会不会不太好。是不是应该主要谈老师，谈两段之后进一步升华时再谈教育更多靠学生自己？

可是为什么要加米？我已经有两篇加过米了，不是不能重复加么

It is now quite common that the teachers of universities are not serious about their teaching. They do not teach earnestly or be concerned with the quality of students’ homework. In other words, it’s seemed that they do not care whether the students have truly learned anything at all. Solutions to this phenomenon have long been discussed among the academics, and possible treatments have been raised to make up for it. One of the proposals is that the university should spend more money on salary for professors. However, according to my perspectives, this method won’t work out at all. For the increase in salary is such a small incentive（seems so little impressive不知道我是不是写得很shi） that won’t affect the attitude of professors, and the fact that the quality of education doesn’t solely depend on the attitude of teachers, but on the performance of students as well, which won’t display much difference whether the professors teach industriously（不如就用你之前的seriously。。？我也不太懂这个。。） or not.开头就看得很困惑。。一开始是说老师对教育不严肃不靠这个赚钱，然后就突然开始讨论教育质量怎么解决。。教育质量比老师态度的范围大很多吧。。lz并没有老师态度是主要原因之类的说明欸。。

Firstly, the professors don’t depend on their salary to cover a cozy life, especially for those have their own fields of research, which give them profitable income.（这应该还有一个“所以薪水不会对他们或者他们的教学质量没多大关系”么？） For example, if a teacher’s income is $5,000 per month, however, what he can gain from his research career is $50,000 per month. As a matter of fact, the teacher won’t care about how much money he could make in teaching at all. Even the university doubled his salary, still, it were only a minor percent of his total income. Not to mention（用let alone吧。。let alone the minor increase。。？放到上一句里面去。。？） that the increase in salary won’t be that much in extend. So the salary incentive method will serve no effect on the attitude of teachers.

In addition, the inner incentives of students play the most important role in one’s pursuit of better education. When a student truly wants to learn something, he will study hard in class, being focused on each word of the teacher, and come to the teacher for further assistance if there is anything he doesn’t grasp very well. Even the teacher didn’t take teaching seriously, he wouldn’t refuse a young’s eager for knowledge. So the quality of education depends more on the attitude of students rather than it of the teacher.（可以加例子说有个同学自己想学啥啥，然后自己做了很多成果，并不一定要指望老师？感觉这段的逻辑也不是很清晰。就是那种A到B，B到C的那种逻辑。。因为托福是人改嘛。。我觉得哈。。）

In a word, spending more money on professors’ salary won’t be an effective method to lift the quality of education. For the incentive is not sufficient to arouse the interest of teachers, and even the quality of education doesn’t depend on teacher at all, as we can see, it depends more on the learners themselves. So instead of focusing on professors, trying to stimulate the interest of students could be a better way. 结尾感觉很好~~~

个人观点，仅供参考哈~lz加油！！！