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本帖最后由 ScottShao 于 2013-8-16 19:49 编辑

Nowadays, sports, including ball games, swimming, running and so on, are becoming an indispensable part of people’s healthy life, leading to popularity of watching sports competition. With the great concern on sports, professional athletes earn not only fame but fortune as well. However, some individuals doubt if it is really necessary to pay such a high salary for an athletes. From my perspective, those athletes do deserve the high salaries that they are paid, for their hard work as well as their sacrifice of private space.

To gain a high salary, professional athletes have to contribute much more time and energy than most workers do. As we all know, ones must accept specialized training when they are still little kids in order to be professional in a given sport field, while others are playing with their friends and have no regard for their future career. Besides, professional athletes almost have no leisure time during their career. For instance, NBA players have to persist 82 games every season, and if we count playoff in, the number would be even bigger. During the offseason, in order to meet the challenge of new season, they also have to work hard in the weight room or on the hardwood even they are not paid to do so. Thus it is their hard work that pay them high salaries.

Furthemore, what they sacrifice is much more than leisure time. Professional athletes, like goldfishes in the bowl, are deprived of the privacy. Every living details of them and everything they are involved with are put under a microscope, which usually bring their families and themselves unimaginable troubles. Taking one of most popular NBA player Lebron James as an example, when he was playing high school basketball, he was highly promoted in national media as a future NBA superstar and thus his life was amplified by news media. Just like what he once said, “My personal life was almost destroyed by news media”, a professional sport player lives in in the spotlight of media and has no private space at all

Admittedly, a small part of professional athletes earn a a large number of money that we ordinary people cannot imagine of. Generally, an athlete’s earning consists of regular salary and endorsement money. According to Forbes magazine, Tiger Woods made 115 million dollars last year, including 90 million dollars in endorsements. Surely, ordinary people cannot earn “115 million dollars” in their whole lifetime and it might be hard for them to think of a person who are able to earn those money within a year. Nevertheless, it is also difficult to envision how much those professional athletes devote to their beloved sports and how much they sacrifice in their personal life.

If we want to earn a salary as high as professional athletes do, we should work as hard as they do and we might make a sacrifice other than private space. Therefore, I do believe that professional athletes deserve the high salaries that they are paid.

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本帖最后由 hdchina2010 于 2013-8-10 16:29 编辑

Nowadays, sports, including ball games, swimming, running and so on, are becoming an indispensable part of people’s healthy life, leading to popularity of watching sports competition. With the great concern on sports, professional athletes earn not only fame but fortune as well. However, some individuals doubt if it is really necessary to pay such a high salary for an athletes. From my perspective, those athletes do deserve the high salaries that they are paid, for their hard work as well as their sacrifice of private space.

To gain a high salary, professional athletes have to contribute much more time and energy than most workers do. As we all know, ones must accept specialized training when they are still little kids in order to be professional in a given sport field, while others are playing with their friends and have no regard for their future career. Besides, professional athletes almost have no leisure time during their career. For instance, NBA players have to persist 82 games every season, and if we count playoff in, the number would be even bigger. During the offseason, in order to meet the challenge of new season, they also have to work hard in the weight room or on the hardwood even they are not paid to do so. Thus it is their hard work that pay them high salaries.

Furthemore(Furthermore), what they sacrifice is much more than leisure time. Professional athletes, like goldfishes in the bowl, are deprived of the privacy. Every living details of them and everything they are involved with are put under a microscope, which usually bring their families and themselves unimaginable troubles. Taking one of most popular NBA player Lebron James as an example, when he was playing high school basketball, he was highly promoted in national media as a future NBA superstar and thus his life was amplified by news media. Just like what he once said, “My personal life was almost destroyed by news media”, a professional sport player lives in in the spotlight of media and has no private space at all(.)

Admittedly, a small part of professional athletes earn a (a) large number of money that we ordinary people cannot imagine(of). Generally, an athlete’s earning (mainly) consists of regular salary and endorsement money. According to Forbes magazine, Tiger Woods made 115 million dollars last year, including 90 million dollars in endorsements. Surely, ordinary people cannot earn “115 million dollars” in their whole lifetime and it might be hard for them to think(of) a person who are able to earn those money within a year. Nevertheless, it is also difficult to envision how much those professional athletes devote(have devoted) to their beloved sports and how much they sacrifice(have sacrificed) in their personal life.

If we want to earn a salary as high as professional athletes do, we should work as hard as they do and we might make a sacrifice other than private space. Therefore, I do believe that professional athletes deserve the high salaries that they are paid.


Excellent T writing.注意一些细节的处理,已经非常棒了。
另外特别赞一下LZ文章中的例子举得非常棒,看来应该也是个球迷O(∩_∩)O~
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hdchina2010 发表于 2013-8-10 16:24
Nowadays, sports, including ball games, swimming, running and so on, are becoming an indispensable p ...

哈哈 球迷  再改一篇 就够1个学分了    别人改过的也可以继续改的
3篇T作文 plz remember  clicking  my signature link to ask 4 credit

保研的日子比较无聊吧 充实一下
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呵呵,谢谢q198800287超版的鼓励
争取每天改一两篇吧~
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hdchina2010 发表于 2013-8-10 16:24
Nowadays, sports, including ball games, swimming, running and so on, are becoming an indispensable p ...

感谢hdchina2010的修改 确实是个球迷 哈:)
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ScottShao 发表于 2013-8-12 09:18
感谢hdchina2010的修改 确实是个球迷 哈:)

客气,欢迎多交流~
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想问下lz,复习独立写作用的什么资料呢?
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molt 发表于 2013-8-17 21:20
想问下lz,复习独立写作用的什么资料呢?

我用的是 新托福考试专项进阶 高级写作  xdf的 美国人写的 中国人翻译的
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 楼主| ScottShao 2013-8-18 12:01:39 | 显示全部楼层
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molt 发表于 2013-8-17 21:20
想问下lz,复习独立写作用的什么资料呢?

李笑来185和各种杂七杂八的高分选手的作文
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