Topic 102.Schools should ask students to evaluate their teachers?

For thousands of years, students acquire knowledge from teachers and teachers evaluate their students with degrees of examinations and tests. However, whether students should in return evaluate their teachers is highly controversial. Some may claim that a mutual supervising mechanism between students and teachers is better than the existed evaluation system, while others argue that students should not be granted for such right. In my opinion, I personally agree with the mutual supervising mechanism and support that students should be given the right to assess their teachers.

The most prominent reason for the merging of the question "should students evaluate their teachers" is the growing number of unqualified teachers entering Universities and colleges. So in the orientation of improving education quality, schools could reverse this tendency by letting students to evaluate teachers and expel those seemingly qualified but in fact unqualified teachers. By implementing the mutual supervising mechanism, students could grade teacher by criterions such as the punctuality of classes, whether teachers can fully illustrate the core concepts of the subjects or just talking about cliches, do teachers have an open mind to students' understanding or extremely dogmatic.In general, teachers with passion and sharp understanding of the subject are often adored by students therefore will get good grade, but teachers who are lax about the course and less inspiring are not welcomed by students and therefore receive lower grades. Thus help the administration to decide which teachers are worth rewarding and who should be expelled.

However, the biggest flaw existed in the mutual supervising mechanism cannot be ignored: some students are so young and immature that they may wrongly evaluate their teachers. In really situations, teachers' insistence on students' punctuality or precision on experiments and homework might enrage(使厌烦) students who are not used to get to classes on time or take experiments seriously. In this case, a responsible and conscientious teacher may receive low credit from students , which is totally unfair. But fortunately, these immature students are after all the minority of the whole picture, today, most college undergraduates are sensible and rational young people who know the merits of following strict rules set up by their teachers.

In a nutshell, in oder to efficiently allocate educational resources, schools should allow students to evaluate their teachers. Not only could this improve the education quality provided to students, but also gather more resources like experiment facilities and fund to qualified teachers and help them to make advancement in their own fields.

不好意思，我来晚了（WJB语气）
你的语法、文句、结构统统没有问题，甚至很棒！但是这篇可能不能拿25+的高分，因为有个很严重的问题——没！有！举！例！子！
你的文章通篇在说理，逻辑说理是GRE作文的核心，但TOEFL作文的核心就是【举例子】！如果一篇400词的文章，应当是大概300词左右的篇幅在举例子。一篇文章里面分2~4个分论点，你需要在每个分论点后面跟上一个非常具体的例子。这个已经说过很多很多遍了，e.g. 你说“... is the growing number of unqualified teachers entering Universities and colleges”，你就可以在后面举一个这样的例子“我们那个省那个市的那个弄堂里面啊，有个大学糙有名的，叫XXX大学，他那个大学的YYY系，今年招了100个老师，60个高中文凭，30个大学刚毕业没教过书，根本不配当老师嘛，怎么教嘛？学生有意见也没地方提，跟媒体提，电视台台长把学生们轰出了办公室，怎么办哪！不如来个教师评测吧！” 例子不需要很真实，不需要很严密的逻辑，但是【一定要【很】具体【很】具体】
For thousands of years, students acquire knowledge from teachers and teachers evaluate their students with degrees of examinations and tests. However, whether students should in return evaluate their teachers is highly controversial. Some may claim that a mutual supervising mechanism between students and teachers is better than the existed evaluation system, while others argue that students should not be granted for such right. In my opinion, I personally agree with the mutual supervising mechanism and support that students should be given the right to assess their teachers.

The most prominent reason for the merging of the question "should students evaluate their teachers" is the growing number of unqualified teachers entering Universities and colleges. So in the orientation of improving education quality, schools could reverse this tendency by letting students to evaluate teachers and expel those seemingly qualified but in fact unqualified teachers. By implementing the mutual supervising mechanism, students could grade teacher by criterions such as the punctuality of classes, whether teachers can fully illustrate the core concepts of the subjects or just talking about cliches, do teachers have an open mind to students' understanding or extremely dogmatic.In general, teachers with passion and sharp understanding of the subject are often adored by students therefore will get good grade, but teachers who are lax about the course and less inspiring are not welcomed by students and therefore receive lower grades. Thus help the administration to decide which teachers are worth rewarding and who should be expelled.

However, the biggest flaw existed in the mutual supervising mechanism cannot be ignored: some students are so young and immature that they may wrongly evaluate their teachers. In really situations, teachers' insistence on students' punctuality or precision on experiments and homework might enrage(使厌烦) students who are not used to get to classes on time or take experiments seriously. In this case, a responsible and conscientious teacher may receive low credit from students , which is totally unfair. But fortunately, these immature students are after all the minority of the whole picture, today, most college undergraduates are sensible and rational young people who know the merits of following strict rules set up by their teachers.

In a nutshell, in oder to efficiently allocate educational resources, schools should allow students to evaluate their teachers. Not only could this improve the education quality provided to students, but also gather more resources like experiment facilities and fund to qualified teachers and help them to make advancement in their own fields.

酱紫呀，那我再往每个分论点后面加些specific的栗子谢谢～有一个问题，你提到400字的文章有300字都是描述例子，这是不是一个fixed的比例呢？比如说我比较擅长论述，在这篇文章的基础上，我加例子变成600字的文章（300字论述300字例子），这样有没有希望得25+呢？