怎么写一个好的PS

以下资料是我汇总我们外教关于PS讲座的内容，获得了外教的批准！总之，以下内容十分有用，我们学校很多学生都是按照这个准则来写PS的，而且美国学校的教授还专门找我谈了我的PS 有多么的好，让她觉得我就是她要找的学生，弄得我好感动的。。。

首先，什么是statement of purpose.
The statement of purpose describes your development as an academic and your intentions for study. Remember that the statement represents your chance to discuss your record in detail not present in the transcript. Treat the statement like your chance to personally make your case to the admissions committee. The statement of purpose is supposed to promote you. If you write a good statement, you'll surprise the admissions committee, and you can dramatically improve your chances for admission.

假如两个学生有相同的学术背景和英语考试成绩，PS是让你脱颖而出的利器。GRE和托福成绩只是过学校的门槛，教授不管，教授一般会花时间去读你的PS来决定要不要录取你。

PS怎么写?
The statement needs to inspire confidence in your ability for graduate study.

• To inspire confidence, you need to sound mature and competent.
  

       Talk in detail about your work in school. Even if the work is just commonplace course projects or papers, talking in detail about work expresses interest in a meaningful way while at the same time demonstrating competence. 通过谈论你的课程项目或论文来证明你对某一领域的了解。 本科生可能没多少科研经历，没什么机会发表论文，但零论文是不会影响博士的申请的,project经历照样有用。

• Do not talk in emotional terms about your interests and plans.
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• Your description of your feelings serves no purpose. An admissions committee member will assume that you love your field of study, and if you don't love it, then you shouldn't tell the committee.
• An emotional connection to a field does not inspire confidence and usually sounds immature.
  

       情绪化没一点好处，因为你可以此时喜欢你的专业，但过一段时间你发现你喜欢上别的了。你讲"how much you love your field"只会增加别人的不信任。应该要有detached and professional tone about your work，用中立的语气去陈述，让读者去下定论。

• If you've suffered personal setbacks, you might feel a need to write about them. Don't give in to the temptation to write at length about past problems. You don't need to apologize for your past, and apologizing sets a bad tone for the statement.
  

       有多时候，大家想在PS中描述为什么成绩单或其他方面不尽人意，其实没必要，因为那些硬件已摆在那儿了。你只需在PS中讲述积极正面的东西就行。有时候，大家还会想强调自己的成长与进步，在PS中写,"I know I've done badly in the past, but I am reformed now." 这些都只会留下坏的印象。

• Don't tell the story of your life in your statement.
  

       The narrative structure of the statement should form the silent background of the statement. If the narrative structure is too much in the foreground, the narrative structure becomes distracting. A statement with a noticeable narrative sounds silly and unprofessional.

• Don't describe the importance or quality of your own work.
  

       Describe the work in detail, and trust the reader to conclude that the work was important or good.
       避免在PS中写道"I've done this really important work"。 Nothing you did in undergraduate is important. If you are applying to graduate school, there is no chance that you work
       is really important; If it was really important, the graduate school will COME TO you. You don't need to apply to graduate school at all.

• Excepting technical language from your field, avoid vocabulary that you wouldn't use in your everyday use of English.
  

       Uncommon words have special connotations, shades of meaning, and while uncommon words are exactly right and appropriate in some circumstances, they can sound hilariously out of place in others. You should use your working English vocabulary, the vocabulary with which you are completely comfortable.
       很多人在准备完GRE后，觉得PS中应该拽几个GRE单词，这样显得很酷。其实效果只会背道而驰。例如，有一个同学写道：
       It's funny that I should have been assuming that I can walk on water for so long before at the age of eighteen, I crumbled under the pressure of my SAT, yet I established an additional fiasco when I obstinately ignored the peril of nonadmission and assertively persisted in applying for Harvard...... I decided to have such profuse and kaleidoscopic experiences not only to further toughen my character and broaden my horizons but more importantly, to prepare myself for further study in chemecial engineering..

• Purge most instances of passive voicing.
  

       Passive voicing uses a transitive verb without identifying the actor. Rather than writing, “I was led to conclude that 2+2=4,” write, “I concluded that 2+2=4.” To the writer, the passive voice sounds modest or makes the events seem like the result of destiny. To the reader, because of the missing actor, the passive voice sounds either incompetent or deceitful.
       尽量用主动时态。主动时态代表自信。

• In general, don't use strong modifiers like very or extremely in your statement.
  

       Direct expressions in the active voice in English are strong enough.

       强调语气词都不好，避免very, extremely, extraordinarily...

PS的一般结构

• Begin by implying that the statement will treat your academic life chronologically. Like I began my academic involvement with Chinese literature when as a student at xxxx university in the fall of 2010, I took my first course in ancient Chinese poetry.
• Discuss all of the noteworthy, academic events in your career in chronological order. Explain your understanding of the academic significance of each event.
• In the conclusion, explain how graduate study appears necessary to continuing your career.
• Refer to interests in particular research and faculty at the program to which you are applying.
• Conclude by saying that you look forward to the chance to study at the school where you are applying.
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好啦，就这些啦。大家若有什么PS的问题的话，可以咨询我哈。

磨豆子的小和尚 发表于 2017-12-6 17:45
楼主，请教一下，EE转CS，开头怎么写比较合适呀？
看到别人开头都是经过学习，要继续在此方向上前行。
那 ...

SOP最好采用时间顺序，讲你一路以来的经历，哪些事件的发生让你对CS的看法逐渐改变，最后读者在结尾高潮部分能得出你适合他们学校项目的结论，你就是他们要找的人。开头无需复杂，无需介绍一大堆东西或概括全文。开头可以简要介绍自己，说自己是哪个学校的，然后开始写一个又一个与你申请领域相关的事件并表达自己的看法，然后结尾说你为什么要申请某个学校。

外教有个修改PS的邮箱： graduate.ps@gmail.com
若想联系他的话，记得用英语通信啊啊啊，他不懂中文。

vivianzzzou 发表于 2019-10-30 09:43
请问一下楼主和大家  Don't tell the story of your life in your statement.这一句应该怎么理解鸭 ...

不好意思，很久没上来了。你可能PS都写完了吧。为了造福以后的读者，先解释一下。很多人倾向于在PS中讲一个又一个的叙述体的小故事，比如或许自己受了某一老师的鼓励怎么从某一专业对另一专业感兴趣了。越多的小故事越拉低PS的专业性。PS should only list neutral facts，讲一路以来自己的学业历程，做了哪些项目，项目中学到了什么，有什么自己对专业的思考。

干货满满的帖子，支持！

终于等来lz的干货

等明年用得上的时候希望我能记得

哇 感谢干货满满的帖子！！

照着你的标准自己又把PS改了下，感谢分享!

只有三分，略表谢意

非常感谢啊！

谢谢，发现自己PS好多你提到的问题